User:Erikaerika222/Nicholas Hlobo/Zmarks1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I think the outline you have in the sandbox is a good start. I would say when you start adding to the actual article, make sure you pay good attention to the grammar and sentence structures. There are many parts that are not only missing information but the sentence structure was off a little. I think you should focus on his LGBTQIA+ presentation because that is a very important fact about him as an African author.