User:Erildape/Fates/Elmcdonald180 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Erildape


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Erildape/Fates?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Fates - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Wow, you are definitely improving the quality of this article where it really needs it. Your descriptions of the fates really ties the article together to make a complete page. When you have the sentence "Elysium is labeled a land for the blessed, the Fields of Punishment is for the souls that committed horrible deeds during their mortal life, and the Fields of Asphodel were for those that lived neither an objectively good or bad life." I suggest changing maybe how the underlined portion is written, such as the those who committed horrible deeds were sent to the Fields of Punishment, just to break up the sentence a bit. Also I'm not sure that you have to have the same source as different citation numbers, so maybe ask Dr. Tysick if you haven't already, I'm just unsure how to format that part. This is just a very solid addition to a page that was struggling and will improve the content provided on Wikipedia.