User:Erinkaline/Cape ground squirrel/GuwopC98 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ErinKalline


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Erinkaline/Cape_ground_squirrel?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cape ground squirrel

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The new addition to the text strengthens that article. One thing I noticed is the citation for the first article. It says "check date values in: date". Just make sure you put the proper date citations in that article. I think that when you reference the body temperature increasing by "a few degrees Celsius", you need to either provide an exact value or a range of values. Also, anytime you mention a change in core body temperature, you should provide the average values. Offering a range could help other readers understand the drastic increase and decrease the Cape Ground squirrel goes through as the seasons/months progress. That would make this addition more reputable. Again, your sources are reliable and your lead section is easy to understand.

The length of the addition is equal to the importance of the topic. The goal of the article is to explain the behavior and ecology of the Cape Ground Squirrel. It does just that. Your information is unbiased, that is very good. The goal is to get the reader to decide on his/her own how to interpret the article. The unbiased approach strengthens your selected topic of Behavior and Ecology for the Cape Ground Squirrel.

In conclusion, your first draft is great. When you add the things mentioned above, it will strengthen the article.