User:Erinkluge/Alice Ambrose/ES8592 Peer Review

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Erinkluge


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 * User:Erinkluge/Alice Ambrose
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 * Alice Ambrose

Evaluate the drafted changes
Good job adding in Wittgenstein's name in place of "he", it provided clarification.

Corrected the spelling on Ph. D

Made the article more grammatically correct than the original, but I can see some places where commas are needed or need to be deleted.

This article was small, but concise. With the little information, the point was achieved. Although it is a nice article, in some places some more explanation could be used to give more detail to people who do not have a background in philosophy or Ambrose.

If you will talk about Wittgenstein, add some information on him, his work, and why it would relate to Ambrose.

If I were to edit, I would not label an entire section "Wittgenstein" because this article is not about him. I would title it "Relationship with Wittgenstein" or something that brings it back to Ambrose.

Maybe name the title of the Ph. Ds she earned.

In 2nd section, don't say "made notes" say "took notes" or "transcribed his class".

All together, I can see that there is not a ton of information readily available on Ambrose and most of it is already in the original article, but I think some more edits besides grammar could be made.