User:Erinmrmurray/sandbox

Peer Review
This article is off to a great start! There is no biased language, and it looks like it's going to talk about the crucial parts of Treaty 5. However, I think to get a better idea of what the article is actually going to be about, you should perhaps list some quick important facts that you plan to incorporate into the article, as well as your references; as well, I was wondering if maybe there should be a section about promises made in the signing, and if those promises are being held up/neglected? Or maybe you were planning to cover that throughout the text! Your 6 sub-headings looks great and well rounded, and I think your article is going to be very factual, balanced, and developed - just don't forget about the Indigenous context! Delaniestrath (talk) 16:38, 14 February 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
The sections you have suggested to add are all well thought out and will add context to the article in a clear and organized fashion.

Under the Geography section, consider explaining the significance that land had to the Swampy Cree people prior to treaty 5 and why the crown wanted that land specifically.

It might also be useful to add in what happened to the Cree after the signing of Treaty 5. Where did they go? Did their living conditions change and how?

I don’t know if you planned to include what happened to the land after the signing of the treaty but it could also be relevant ie: how it changed, who moved onto the land. I believe it would fit well after the information you’re including in the Historical context section.

The article is examining both the government and the Indigenous perspectives and I do not see any form of bias in the article.

Article Evaluation - Hudson's Bay Company
Everything in the article is relevant to the topic, there is a large focus on the department store, so maybe they could be split into two articles. One about the fur trading company and the other about the department store. The article is very neutral, not leaning towards any particular position on the subject. However, the Indigenous standpoint is underrepresented in the article, as the article focusses on the "European story" of the fur trade. The links from the citations do lead to sources that support the claims in the article. There are many sources, as it is quite a long article. One of the "talk" sections of the article features a need for more citations, which seems to have been resolved. Most of the information comes from HBC websites, which could lead to issues of bias, as they present themselves in a positive light. This bias is not noted in the article. Numerous primary sources are also used. To my knowledge, no information from this article seems to be missing. This article is part of numerous WikiProjects, and has a "good article" rating. This article seems quite spot-on with the information we have discussed in class, so far.

Add to an Article - Virgin Soil Epidemic
I added a sentence to this article (citation 5). I used our class textbook, Clearing the Plains, by James Daschuk.

Treaty 5
Treaty 5 was also known as the Winnipeg Treaty, which was similar to the previous numbered treaties. The Indigenous peoples around Lake Winnipeg were interested in negotiating with the Canadian Government for treaty lands. The Crown did not view this land as particularly desirable, as it had limited possibilities for future settlement. We plan to contribute the implications to the Indigenous population affected by this treaty, as well as the contents of the treaty.

Draft your Article (improving an existing article) - Treaty 5
The lead of our article is already there. However, there is quite a bit of information missing from the article as a whole. We have decided to add 6 sub-headings to our article. They are: historical context, geography, groups involved, negotiations, timeline, issues, and present day. We have devised some questions that we want to answer in each of these sections.
 * Historical Context: What happened immediately leading up to the signing of the treaty? Were there previous issues with this land? What caused this treaty to be signed?
 * Geography: What areas did this cover? Maps, etc.
 * Groups involved: These are adequately listed, but we hope to add some details about each group
 * Timeline: again, this is quite adequate already, bu we hope to add more details
 * Isses: More information on the part (Pimicikamak territory)m that was added "accidentally or by design." Were there issues that were faced by either the Indigenous peoples or the government?
 * Present day: How did this area change over time (who had control, more or less land, etc.) What are the issues that face these people today?