User:Erthorndyke/A Gathering of Old Men/Archeddar Peer Review

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Erthorndyke
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Evaluate the drafted changes
I looked at both your published changes on the actual wiki article and your sandbox.

Lead: If you have time, I wonder if you can add more information to the lead. Maybe a brief summary of the reception of the book and a brief explanation of what the book is about.

Plot Summary: I know that you did not write the plot summary. But as I read it, I felt really confused by what was actually happening. For example, I was confused on why Candy, the white plantation owner, was trying to protect Mathu. Again, if you have time, I wonder if you can clean up the plot summary and make it more detailed.

Major Characters: I really like how you added this section! I think everything you have written is concise and neutral-toned. I personally think it's well-written and that it looks great to move over to the wiki article.

Symbolism: Is definitely an important contribution to the article. I think everything you wrote is neutral-toned. I just had trouble understanding your explanation for how the tractor symbolizes change that the men have experienced. But this could possibly be because I didn't read the book. Maybe just make some of the wording more clear?