User:Ertrempe/Thomas Lumley/STAT336-LE Peer Review

Changes I made to the article:


 * Fixed super minor typos (missing spaces, extra spaces, etc.)
 * Replaced hyphens (like in "from 1987-1991") with "to" because I thought it might look better to audiences. What do you think about it?
 * Altered your formatting when referring to universities because I initially thought it was kind of confusing ("University of Auckland in New Zealand" rather than "University of Auckland, New Zealand")
 * Added a link to the University of Auckland in opening sentence

Other comments:


 * To my understanding, at least, it's super important to include links to other Wikipedia articles (universities, areas of study, associations/societies, etc.)
 * I really liked how many sources you incorporated into your article, I think I only found about half as many...
 * Your lead is definitely helpful in providing a general understanding of the topic. The majority of it is about associations, teams, etc. that he is a part of, though-- it may also also be helpful to include a sentence or two about what he does and researches!
 * Super minor detail, but I really liked how your awards section is in chronological order-- definitely makes things a lot easier for audiences
 * Unless I am mistaken, your section title "Thomas Lumley" does not need to exist because Wikipedia will automatically do that for you. Also remember to write his name at the beginning in bold!

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