User:Esalo001/Aura Timen/S.benjamin28 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Group 3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Esalo001/Aura_Timen?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

- I think you could start with early life, and put the small paragraph that is first under career.

Early life

- Her early life looks good. Try and find where she was born, and who her parents are if that is public record. But everything in that section looks very good.

Career

- You could use more hyper links throughout the page, especially for the big organizations being named.

- Under career you could also add any awards she has.

Covid-19

- You could break up the paragraphs, it looks like alot of information at first glance which could overwhelm a read.

- Cite the quotes at the bottom, could also give more context for them.

-Use more hyperlinks