User:Eshah888/Virtual reality therapy/JRPerez13 Peer Review

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Eshah888
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 * User:Eshah888/Virtual reality therapy/Bibliography
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 * Virtual reality therapy

Evaluate the drafted changes
Being that VRT is a relatively new idea, I find that the proposed changes are valuable since they provide the reader with more information regarding future implications of the technology. One minor adjustment I would suggest is attending to small grammatical errors in order to improve readability of the text as well as boost your credibility. Additionally, I would suggest implementing more sources to back up some of the points made throughout the text. If possible, I would suggest to look for more academic sources in order to improve the credibility of the text. Overall, I think you did a good job and you could make some minor adjustments to make it even better!