User:Esmeraldaboror/Sexual dimorphism in non-human primates/Lenisa Castaneda Peer Review

Peer review
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General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (Esmeraldaboror)
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Esmeraldaboror/Sexual dimorphism in non-human primates

Lead
The lead is not too clear on how you will expand on it. It does include an introductory sentence that described what sexual dismorphism is, but a better hook as to letting us know you will be going over how its changed compared to early years would help the lead. The Lead does include a description of the major sections, specifically the ones you will be editing which is helpful to understand what you are exactly adding to the article. I like how you included the importance of darwinism is the section regarding sexual selection and you brought in new information that the article failed to include. The Lead is detailed and has great structure to the new information that will be added which is extremely helpful.

Content
The content added was really significant and it helped tie the article back to anthropology. The sources are topics we have gone over in class so it's relevant and relevant to the specific sections you are adding too. I noticed that 3 out of 4 articles are before the year 2000, so maybe finding more up-to-date articles would help bring even newer information to the article. The information close to the end seems like it's repeating what the beginning of the article stated. This can be noted for when you are updated the "body size" section. Also I think we are allowed to use to the textbook so possibly look at the textbook for more up-to-date information that you can use to at least have one more source that is recent. Since this page focuses on non-human-primates, I would assume you can elaborate on other animals besides hyenas as well that the article didn't mention.

Tone and Balance
You did a great job at keeping the article neutral. It blends well with what is already in the article. What I will ask is the Darwinism statement, saying it's ineffective, would that be a personal opinion or will you be citing that? The information you stated at the end of the sandbox should be cited to not let it sound as if you are giving an opinionated statement, regarding aggression based on sex.

Sources and References
The information is reliable based on the sources you gave, they are just out dated. They might be more significant if you base them off of anthropology. Your links work, just once again try more updated sources, and we can even used sources that were used in the article, as long as it's new information from that source that was used.

Organization
The sandbox is not in the article format so I would not be able to know if it is easy to read, but based off the structure, it seemed easy to read. Great job and showing the structure of what you will be adding. There are no grammatical errors.

Overall impressions
You are adding more new information, so you're improving the article well. The strengths are including new information like the connection with darwinism. To improve the information i see you are adding, i recommend using more up-to-date sources, and using those to not sound repetitive with the information that is already in the article