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Article Evaluation
Placebo studies was the article that I decided to read and evaluate. The information in the article was all relevant to the topic but the wording was a little confusing to follow and some of the information was not necessarily needed or was in the wrong section. A couple of the facts he stated, like with the diseases, distracted me a little because it was so out of the blue and didn't flow very well so I had to read it a few times over.

I think they could have added more to the background information to let the reader know a little more about the topic because most likely they had no idea what the Placebo Effect was before they saw this article. Some of the articles that are used are very out of date, some even from the mid 1900's. I think it would be worth going back and checking if the information is still relevant to this day.

I think the only other thing that they would need to improve on is the structure and the length of the article overall. The Placebo Effect is a huge topic in this world and I feel like there is so much more you could write about this. I also think the structure and placement of phrases could use some work because right now it does not flow as nicely but it will if you switch around some information and fix up the sentences.

Overall the article is very neutral it's basically just giving background information. Each source brings me to a reliable website there was only one link that did not work properly. They are factual websites and give statistics as well as background info about this topic.

There was only one question that was asked in the talk page, not much conversation going on. This article was apart of two wikiprojects. We don't talk about this in class but if we were I feel as if it would be more opinion based then just factual data analysis.

Article Selection
The article I chose was an article on student athletes and what it actually means. The article touches on how colleges portray the term in different divisions of the NCAA. It also talks about the pressure and the amount of stress it puts on a person to be a student athlete in any form of athletics that goes along with school work and studying. Overall, this article was very informative and gave a lot of information and research on the topic and talked about all the different sides. It could be more professional and could be styled a little better in general. It also needs to be directed more to the general public so it is easier for people to understand if they don't understand sports or follow sports. It should also related to other countries and not just the United States so it gives more examples from around the world.

Article Edits
Edit #1

"student-athletes are full time students as well as full time athletes. Due to educational institutions being colleges, they offer athletic scholarships in various sports. Many student athletes are compensated with scholarships to attend these institutions but these scholarships are not mandatory to be considered a student athlete."

Edit: Student-athletes are full time students and athletes at the same time. Colleges offer athletic scholarships in many sports. Many student athletes are given scholarships to attend these institutions but scholarships are not mandatory in order to be called a student athlete.

Edit #2

"Student athletes put a great deal of time into their studies and in their sport. Student athletes face high levels of stress related to their performances both in their sport and in the classroom. This stress is heightened by the expectations placed on the student athletes, by their coaches, administration and teammates to perform at a very high level."

Edit:

Student athletes put a great deal of time into their studies and athletics. Student athletes face high levels of stress. This stress is heightened by the expectations placed on the student athletes, by their coaches, administration and teammates to perform at a very high level. The transition for athletes can be hard academically because they don't know what to expect and are not ready for the work load they are going to get in college. Having study hall a few times a week or designated library times will force the athletes to study at certain times of the day so it is not as easy to get distracted.

Edit #3

In fact, only about 2% of high school athletes will earn an athletic scholarship to an NCAA university and on average, these scholarships are less than $11,000 and that is not even enough to go to school with.

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... As students, academic responsibilities such as, attending classes, studying, and passing exams need to come first in the athletes mind. The student athletes must meet the NCAA eligibility standards. Failure to meet these standards and complete their academic work could be a risk to the student athlete’s ability to compete, receive scholarships, and graduate from the institution at which they are enrolled.”