User:Espalding/International Women's Film Festival/EllieB15 Peer Review

General info
The International Women's Film Festival group
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Espalding/International Women's Film Festival
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):International Women's Film Festival

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think the lead is very strong, the original article is missing a lead completely and is just a list of film festivals, so I think their work on explaining the history and significance adds a lot to the article. I like that it's divided into 3 sections so it's not just a block of text about the subject it helps a lot with clarity. I think one part of history that would be super interesting if you could find it would be who started the first women's film festival, having a name attached would be really interesting but if it's not something easy to find then the lead is strong as it is.

The organization builds off of the original by keeping the list but expanding on some of the entries which I think is a good and clear way to go about the organization. I think part of the draft is still unfinished because the last list entry, the Herat Women's festival does not have any information under it just some bulleted ideas of what to write but I'm sure the group will work on that and finish it up.

The references part is also not formatted completely right there's a link that still needs to be formatted.

Overall the article is good, the lead is especially really strong and adds the context the original article was missing. Great job!EllieB15 (talk) 16:28, 2 October 2023 (UTC)