User:Espalding/International Women's Film Festival/User7185 Peer Review

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Espalding - International Women's Film Festival
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This article has a great base and is separated into distinct categories that will make it very understandable once fully developed. To start with the lead, I think this group started off well by introducing what a Women's Film Festival entails and giving a little bit of history behind it. Each section would benefit from more transition sentences as well as a little bit more explanation into the topics discussed. For example, the first section mentions women are inaccurately depicted in films created by men but fails to provide specific evidence of this. Additionally, the second section in the lead needs a source to back up the information. The history of women's exclusion from film should also be expanded upon as that is a large basis for the article. This section is what will really help to show the importance of having Women's Film Festivals so it must be clear to the reader that there is a longstanding issue with exclusion in the industry. I think the article body is set up well as well, as it is insightful to discuss the different types of women's film festivals around the world. Overall, I think this draft shows balanced coverage as well as a neutral tone, but this should be double checked once more of the article body is written. The sources seem reliable but more should be acquired to make sure all information on the history of film festivals has a source to back it up. Lastly, as there are many women's film festivals all over the world, I would be interested to know why this group picked those four countries to discuss. If there is something special about those festivals, make sure it is mentioned in your writing. Also, it would be helpful to link other wikipedia pages that refer to other women's film festivals so that readers can access all the information from one page. This is a great start to the article and I think it will turn out amazing! ~