User:Est22/Neripteron vespertinum/TP0041 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Est22


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Est22/Neripteron vespertinum
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Neripteron vespertinum

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead is great. It adds more to the article and follows Wikipedia's guidelines for a lead being able to be read on its own. I like that you added its name in Olelo. The added content is neutral. The amount of sources will be a very good improvement for the current state of the published article. The information is easy to read and organized in their own sections nicely. Your draft will make the article more complete. What year did this species become endangered? Do you know if they are struggling to adapt to the sea after primarily living in freshwater? I would like to know more about its morphology if that information is available. Overall, your first draft is great!

Response
Aloha,

'''I appreciate the thorough feedback! I have yet to find a source of when this species became endangered, because not much information is known about them. I will take your questions and feedback to improve my draft.'''

Mahalo!