User:Ethanmorriis/Serpent mound/Dsm9603 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ethanmorriis


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ethanmorriis/Serpent mound


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
I am very impressed by the first paragraph, it is very clear and informative as to exactly what the Serpent Mound is and it's significance. I do feel like there can be a little more information in the first paragraph (or other paragraphs) detailing the origins of the Serpent Mound. There are some grammatical issues throughout the work, for instance the "The" should be lowercase in the second sentence of paragraph 2. I would like to see more information on what native group created the mound, and this has a lot of potential to contribute to this article! Another issue to fix would be the formatting of the second paragraph, as it contains a little too much information about what the serpent mound looks like. Rather, you can add a quick picture with a clear description of certain aspects of the mound. Overall, your draft was a pleasure to read and I look forward to your final presentation!