User:Eungjeonglee/sandbox

Updated for September 27th Sandbox: User:Eungjeonglee/VR Systems

My selected article is VR Systems. I plan on updating the election software's more recent status with the pandemic. Their official website has updated ELM, which is briefly an online training platform for election staffs, poll-workers, and candidates. Alongside ELM, there are four product listed on the official website that is the most up-to-date. However, currently the article page only shows one product, the EViD Electronic pollbook. Therefore, I will add the VoterFocus(Election Management), ELM(Elections Training), and VR Tower(Website Services). The "Russian Target" section is also in need of more citation and details.

Draft
User:Eungjeonglee/VR Systems

Response to peer reviews
Thank you to my peer reviewers for their constructive suggestions and detailed insights into my draft! Thanks to them, I found out the timeline of my introduction, and history sections were too repetitive, therefore, redundant. Justin's suggestion to place the "Russian Target" after introducing the products makes total sense. I mentioned several of the consequences before defining the purposes of utilization seemed illogical. I have yet to complete the citation for the four products I wanted to clarify the functionality of. Yet, it was challenging to find a source that explains it while not promoting it. I will look more into it and cite each of them individually for a comprehensive understanding of the topic. And thanks to my peer reviewers, I found out my problem with run-on sentences and the tendency of composing long sentences. This problem made my article hard to understand for the general public, which is the target of Wikipedia; therefore, I should dedicate more time to improve upon this.