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Professor Schreiber feedback
Evan - This is very strong work, and I appreciate how much information you are adding to Hammer's site. Your use of sources is excellent. I think that your classmates' feedback is terrific and I appreciate that you are working to incorporate it into your latest draft.MJSProf (talk) 18:12, 14 April 2018 (UTC)

Reply to Peer Review (by Evan)

To Addie: I will try to add as much as I can about her personal life (including family and children.) There is limited information on this element of her life, and in an interview, Hammer actually says she intentionally does not share much about her personal life so that she can stay out of the lime light for her personal relationships. I like your point about the fact that I should change the career section and title it "awards," so I will make sure to do that.

To Julia: I think I should combine the two sentences you gave as an example and I agree with your edit. I will be sure to do this. I will also try to find more on Hammer's childhood, even though I really could not find this information. I will try to look through even more sources to achieve this.

Peer Review by Adelaide Owens

Evan, I think there are many strong elements to your additions. One thing I noticed when reading the original article is that there is a lot missing about Hammer as a person, as it focuses mainly on her sexual orientation and her career. Thus, I liked your addition of the personal life section to her article and I think that you could take the section even farther into her personal life, steering it away from her career a little more, talking about where she grew up, went to school, if she was married, when she died etc. I think that everything you added was relevant to the article; however, I found the section titled "career" to be a little distracting, as I felt like it was an overwhelming list of the awards she was given, and that you could go into more detail about the background behind these films (when they were made, what they were about) or else you could change the name of the section to "awards" or "legacy." You definitely did a great job for the most part staying neutral in this article, as some of the topics are sensitive I think that you conveyed them in a factual way. There were two phrasings that I noticed and I would change. The first being under the section "Filmography" when you refer to the topics of her film as "typically too personal too share" you might change it to something like "taboo in our society" because everyone has their own opinion of what is too personal to share. The second is also under the section "Filmography" when you refer to Nitrate Kisses saying "Her most well-known film is probably." I thought you could change this to "One of her most well known films is" unless there is a specific reference which shows that this was her most well known film. I thought you did a good job on the references, they all seemed like solid sources that work well in this article and I think the interview with Hammer was a particularly good addition. Overall, I liked the additions, and my main suggestion would be to work on the lead section, as I think that there could still be more added factually about her life.

Evan Pearl Peer Review by: Julia Kaplowitz

Overall, I think this lead section is very successful and super factual! I like how clear and concise you were able to make it, with the inclusion of lots of information, especially regarding Hammer’s career. I appreciate your tone being neutral, but I also think that perhaps some sentences could be reworded to sound a little less awkward and slightly more complex. One example I am thinking of is, “Hammer has created more than 80 moving image works throughout her life. She received a great number of honors during this time as well.” Maybe you could merge these sentences into one, and rephrase it. However, something that was extremely beneficial in this lead section was the addition of sources. It is crucial to understand where the facts are being taken from, so I appreciate how many citations you used. Finally, my last comment would be that I agree with Addie—one aspect that could use further improvement is background on Hammer’s upbringing. A general overview could be helpful for readers to get a taste of Hammer’s life before delving into the rest of the article. You can address questions such as where was Hammer born, what was her childhood like, etc. Great job though! Personal Life:

“Barbara Hammer (born May 15, 1939) is an American feminist filmmaker known for being one of the pioneers[1] of lesbian film whose career has spanned over 40 years. Hammer is known for creating experimental films dealing with women's issues such as gender roles, lesbian relationships and coping with aging and family.” (already on the Wikipedia) She currently resides in New York City and Kerhonson, New York, but lives in Saas-Fee, Switzerland each summer while teaching at The European Graduate School. [1]

Career:

Hammer has created more than 80 moving image works throughout her life. [2] She has received a great number of honors during this time as well.

In 2007, Hammer was honored with an exhibition and tribute in Taipei at the Chinese Cultural University Digital Imaging Center. In New York in 2010, Hammer had a one month exhibition at The Museum of Modern Art. Additionally, in 2013 she was granted a Guggenheim Fellowship for her film Waking Up Together. She also had exhibitions in London at The Tate Modern in 2012, in Paris at Jeu de Paume also in 2012, in Toronto for the International Film Festival in 2013 and in Berlin at the Koch Oberhuber Woolfe in both 2011 and 2014. [3]

In terms of awards, Hammer was given a great number during the span of her career. She was chosen by the Whitney Museum of American Art Biennials in the late 1985, 1989, and 1993 for her films Optic Nerve, Endangered and Nitrate Kisses respectively. In 2006, she won both the first ever Shirley Clarke Avant-Garde Filmmaker Award from New York Women in Film and Television as well as the Women in Film Award from the St. Louis International Film Festival. [4]

Moreover, in 2008 she was given The Leo Award from the Flaherty Film Seminar. Her films Generations and Maya Deren’s Sink both won the Teddy Award in 2011 for Best Short Films. Her film A Horse Is Not A Metaphor won the Teddy Award for Best Short Film in 2009 it also won Second Prize at the Black Maria Film Festival. It was also selected for several film festivals: the Torino Gay and Lesbian Film Festival, Punta de Vista Film Festival, the Festival de Films des Femmes Creteil, and the International Women’s Film Festival Dortmund/Koln. [5]

In 2010, Hammer wrote a book called Hammer! Making Movies Out of Sex and Life. She went on a book tour the same year to showcase it. [6]

Filmography/techniques:

Hammer is an avant-garde filmmaker and focuses a large sum of her films on feminist or lesbian topics. Through the use of experimental cinema, Hammer has exposed her audiences to feminist theory. Her films, she says, are meant to promote “independence and freedom from social restriction.” [7]

Her films were regarded as being so controversial because they focused on feminine topics that are typically too personal to share, such as menstruation, the orgasm from the female perspective, and lesbianism. [8]

Hammer experimented with different film gauges in the 1980’s, especially with 16 mm film. She did this in order to show just how fragile film itself is. [9]

Her most well-known film is probably Nitrate Kisses for being most controversial. It “explores three deviant sexualities–S/M lesbianism, mixed-race gay male lovemaking, and the passions and sexual practices of older lesbians” [10].

Feminist/lesbian works impact:

Through her controversial work, she is considered as a pioneer of queer cinema. [11] Her goal through her film work is to provoke discourse on those who are marginalized, and more specifically, lesbians who are marginalized. She feels that making films that show her personal experience renaming herself as lesbian will help start the conversation on lesbianism and get people to stop ignoring its existence. [12]

Women Filmmakers Person of Choice

Ranked List

1. Barbara Hammer

2. Lucrecia Martel

3. Jill Soloway

Upon conducting my research, I relied heavily on JSTOR, Google books and Google scholar. While I did look on Project Muse and other sources, I found the ones I listed above to be the most useful. I was able to find information on the career histories of Barbara Hammer, Lucrecia Martel, and Jill Soloway, as well as some information of their personal lives. It was more difficult, however, to find information on their personal lives. This is because most of the articles contained information solely on their filmmaking works. I also found it to be very hard in general to find information on many of the women on the filmmaker’s list provided for us in class. Most of the people on there that had a great sum of articles online were women whose Wikipedia pages were already lengthy and did not need much additional information on them. The shorter pages, however, were harder for me to find new sources on them. Overall, I think I found what I would need to have in order to add a good deal of information onto their Wikipedia pages on their films and lives, but I still feel that it would be nice if there was more information about these women online.

1.	Barbara Hammer

a.	http://barbarahammer.com/about/bio/

i.	This article is on her website. It is a biography about Barbara Hammer and discusses her personal life, as well as her career. I think it will be very helpful in filling in the gaps on her personal life on her Wikipedia.

b.	 http://barbarahammer.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/08/Kate-Haug_An-Interview-with-Barbara-Hammer-1998.pdf

i.	This article is about an interview with Barbara Hammer. I feel that I will be able to get a sense of why and how she was able to create such prevalent work on feminist matters through this interview, since many of the questions concern her feminist view and artistic tactics.

c.	https://books.google.com/books?id=eMjgq8lsEMAC&pg=PA400&lpg=PA400&dq=Uncommon+History:+An+Interview+with+Barbara+Hammer&source=bl&ots=jZvX-C_vvH&sig=MxaDIxEGMmTyVxzw4SC2pB69Dp0&hl=en&sa=X&ved=0ahUKEwi5xqWBk7rZAhUFUt8KHdY3AwoQ6AEIRTAF#v=onepage&q=barbara%20hammer&f=false

i.	This book discusses many women in cinema that used experimental techniques or ideas in their work. Barbara Hammer is mentioned several times in this book for her unique viewpoint and her filmmaking.

2.	Lucrecia Martel

a.	http://www.jstor.org.proxy.library.emory.edu/stable/40428227?Search=yes&resultItemClick=true&searchText=Lucrecia&searchText=Martel%22&searchText=Source:&searchText=BOMB,&searchText=No&searchUri=%2Faction%2FdoBasicSearch%3Facc%3Don%26amp%3Bgroup%3Dnone%26amp%3BQuery%3DLucrecia%2BMartel%25E2%2580%259D%2BSource%253A%2BBOMB%252C%2BNo%26amp%3Bfc%3Doff%26amp%3Bwc%3Don&refreqid=search%3A520bcb0f05ec0fa0af7e82a250325416

i.	This article is an interview with Martel. Martel reflects on her life and her career. She also discusses her opinion on film as an art and its materiality. This article will help me add to filmography section and give a brief synopsis on some of her works (since they are only listed on Wikipedia, not discussed).

b.	http://www.ejumpcut.org/archive/jc50.2008/LMartelAudio/text.html

i.	This article discusses Martel’s two films La niña santa and La ciénaga in depth. It also discusses Martel’s habits as a filmmaker and her importance in the area of New Argentine Cinema. This will also help add to the discussion of her career.

c.	https://books.google.com/books?hl=en&lr=&id=SmYjDgAAQBAJ&oi=fnd&pg=PP1&dq=Lucrecia+Martel+film&ots=DrUkDTRdsT&sig=MoZsCnqglI8Lmry96F9sSX16m4Y#v=onepage&q=Lucrecia%20Martel%20film&f=false

i.	 The entirety of this book disucsses Martel’s cinematic style and career. This is a book entirely dedicated to Martel’s personal life, her background, her filmmaking, and her influence.

3.	Jill Soloway

a.	http://www.jstor.org.proxy.library.emory.edu/stable/pdf/10.7312/will17892.6.pdf?refreqid=excelsior%3A7844df0627dc0164df7dc59cbe70dc18

i.	This article discusses Soloway’s career, and discusses her show Transparent in depth. It discusses aspects of her personal life, such as her religious beliefs, and her reasons for creating this controversial show on a transgender.

b.	https://books.google.com/books?hl=en&lr=&id=8Pcxmu2of7MC&oi=fnd&pg=PP1&dq=jill+soloway&ots=csbI8mkUjO&sig=M9Y01dp6dp6T7V_un7V41_5jDNw#v=onepage&q&f=false

i.	This is Jill Soloway’s book on her own life. She discusses her past, how it was growing up, and how she can reflect on her early life now. This will be helpful in adding to her personal life section, which is lacking on Wikipedia.

c.	She Wants It: Desire, Power, and Toppling the Patriarchy

i.	Soloway’s book released this year on herself. This is a fully autobiographical book and discusses specific aspects of her whole life (as opposed to the other book that only discusses her young life.) If I used this, I would have to purchase the hardcopy (not available online yet).

LEONTINE SAGAN

I feel that everything is relevant, however, I was distracted by how limited the information was. There was hardly any information on Sagan's personal life and her career is also only a few short paragraphs in length. Her prominence and impact on the field on cinema and women's cinema specifically is not noted. The article is neutral for the most part, but does claim that her three films are notable (so this is in her favor.) The links do work that are in the citations and support what little information is there in the article. However, there are few sources used overall. The article discusses Sagan very similarly to how we did in class.