User:Evc32/Genetic testing/RhetoricH&W2022 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Evc32


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Evc32/Genetic_testing?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Genetic testing

Evaluate the drafted changes
There's no new lead drafted, though it seems like the article's original lead is very comprehensive. Unless your group pointed out flaws with it initially, it seems like you're fine.

The content seems neutrally written and current, though I'm wondering if there could be a little bit of elaboration to better address an equity gap. At the end of this section you reference political controversy among indigenous groups, but I'm a little confused as to what the controversy was/why the testing was a big deal.