User:EvorLi/Glacial stream/SavannahShir Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Liam Li, Kiersten Vestergaard, Julia Klossok, Ramneek Kang


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:EvorLi/Glacial stream


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Glacial stream

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, I think there is a good range of information on glacial streams. I also really like your headings that you chose, they make a lot of sense to me. You are missing a lead, though, maybe you can include the glacial stream definition in the lead as well? I also think it would really help creating a drawing of the 3 types of flow on glacials, having a visual of it may be easiest to interpret (Try Paint 3D or just Paint to do this!)

I think the channel formation section is good, but seems a bit misleading, since you start with how glaciers modify landscapes. maybe try to introduce first how streams run down these valleys, or some other way to be more explicit that streams are not what is shaping these valleys into U's. Also it would be good to define what sinuosity is, I'm not sure all readers would be familiar with this term. Also could subsituting "basal topography" with "underlying topography" be more clear? I'm not 100% sure these are interchangable however.

The stream discharge section is nice to have, and I think its gret that you state that it is variable. Including how this variation presents would be nice as well. For example, stating that highest discharges occur during summer due to glacial melt or snow melt, and how glacial melt is most important in the summer, while snow melt most important during the spring. Also maybe giving some examples of discharges in some glacial streams would be good to give some context.

Since this section is smaller, giving examples of some mountain ranges with many glaciers streams could be good, or expanding on how glacial streams are detected, or accessed when research is done on them may be a nice inclusion. Also expanding on how climate change has impacted location of these streams.

I really like the ecology section, I think it has some nice details as well as encorparating some great scientific literature! I learned a lot about how ecology can differ throughout the year and depends on different variables such as temperatures and flow. I think the use of "resident periphyton" seems a bit jargony, so maybe subsitute this for just "organisms living on aquatic plants"? I like the kryal, krenal and rhtitheral communities, I think exploring this may be interesting, however it also may put too much focus on the ecology section.

For the human impact section, are there any impacts from diversion/damming of these streams. Maybe there's not because there often remote, just want to check!

I think overall, the tone is really neutral which is great, just make sure this continues as you make your bullet points into paragraphs, I find this is personally where I have trouble with it sometimes.

Citations/references are great, good mix of textbooks, government documents and scientific articles, I do however want to make sure this source : http://www.glaciers.pdx.edu/Thesis/Dougall/index.htm Is legitimate, its kind of a random website, but it says its someone's thesis on the hyperlink, maybe just double check what school this student was doing their thesis for? I think the sources you used are fairly inclusive, I know most perspectives on this stuff is from a scientific viewpoint, but maybe try to look at news articles to try to find any public or varying opinions on this topic?