User:Ewesolick/Photojournalism/Freyaus Peer Review

General info
(Photojournalism)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ewesolick/Photojournalism - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Photojournalism - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Explaining what photojournalism, a great start is compared to just jumping into facts about the concept. The first thing I notice is the citation page is messing as that is very important. Your edit stays exactly in line with the online Wikipedia page and leaves a lot of the main parts of the passage the same. I think this is very well done as changing to much can cause problems. Is there any way to possible add a photo that can show photojournalism? Did nice job on giving examples after stating a fact. Can tell the somehow tell the difference just by wording what is your words and what they have already wrote. This is not a bad problem. All in all, not much looks wrong with this draft at all other than messing in test citation and the citation page.