User:ExplorerRoxy/Harlequin-type ichthyosis/Lewis.tristen Peer Review

General info
ExplorerRoxy
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:ExplorerRoxy/Harlequin-type ichthyosis
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Harlequin-type ichthyosis

Evaluate the drafted changes
While the content/changes being addressed are relevant to the topic in question, it does propose the question: where is ExplorerRoxy planning to receive this information? Nowhere in the Sandbox draft is the user's citations or list of references; which is a crucial part of the editing process.

While the user's bibliography does list at least one source in its reference section, nowhere in the draft of revisions is there any sort of proper citations for the information the user is planning to update. I would suggest that following their research, the user include concise references and make sure to properly cite all of his/her information clearly.

Additionally, it seems as though the user has added very little original contributions in his/her draft. I would encourage them to dig deeper and search for information referring to the disease which has not yet been added. I encourage them to do more research on this topic in order to broaden their contributions.

Nonetheless, the spelling and diction used in the user's draft is correct, and their information does indeed pertain to the topic at hand. The user's curiosity regarding the topic of ichthyosis is admirable.