User:Eyannaib/Pain psychology/Deswilliams22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Eyannaib


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Pain psychology
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pain psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think all of the revisions you made were appropriate. Condensing the language and taking out "flat words" such as "It" makes the article more focused and readable. After reading the paragraphs in context, your additions made the introduction flow smoother. You've done a great job with adding to the brief overview and not sounding biased.

Moving forward, I would begin to brainstorm on how you can separate the rest of the information presented in the Introduction of your page. Potentially, the second paragraph could stay in the introduction, or it could be put under a section titled "Pain Psychologist vs Physician". I think this will solidify with the reader that pain psychology is not geared towards physical health as much as it is mental health. There also seems to be enough information in the following paragraphs to have a "Research" and a "Treatments" section added.

Overall, great edits!

Response to Peer Review
Thank you for your feedback. You are right. My article could use a "Treatments" section so that I can go further in depth of the psychology of pain in the original section. I did not use the title suggestion of "Pain Psychologist vs Physician" because I do not want to focus on the work of a physician vs a psychologist but more so educate on the treatment of pain and the mental effects from chronic pain. I might use this idea in the future as I add on to my article but I'm not quite there yet.