User:Ezahnzin/Banshee/ProbablyGasha Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ezahnzin


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ezahnzin/Banshee?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Banshee

Evaluate the drafted changes
I can't see any sources on the bibliography it gave me so either it is somewhere else or it does not exist. If it's the former, I don't know how much I can help. In the case of the latter, you probably should make one.

I like your approach of clarifying the difference between the popular depictions and the real mythological being. I would think you could put it in the already extant but bare-bones "In popular culture" section of the article since the banshee scream is a creation of pop culture. Adding a next section called "myth and fact" feels wrong due to the entire thing being mythology to begin with.

You would probably want to run a grammar checker over your proposed edits in the sandbox; for example, there is a "yes" that doesn't seem to fit into the rest in the second sentence. If you plan to keep the Mortal Kombat reference, you would likely want to describe the scream as a finisher rather than use the verb "FINSH" written in all capitals (it feels informal for an information source about real people's beliefs).

Lastly, you'll want to cite sources for the claims made in your sandbox. Myth changes constantly and it would only be a good thing to ensure such claims are completely true when the "myths" you talk about could very easily be another, equally valid version of the myth in question.

--ProbablyGasha (talk) 03:51, 2 November 2021 (UTC)