User:Ezekebetito/History of basketball/KarimMassarani Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ezebe Betito


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ezekebetito/History_of_basketball?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * History of basketball

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content: The content Zeke is planning to add to his article is completely relevant to the topic. Zeke is talking about Olympic basketball history in a "History of Basketball" Wikipedia article, which totally makes sense. The content Zeke is adding does not need to be up-to-date as it is about Olympic basketball history. There is no missing content or content that should not belong in the "History of Basketball" Wikipedia article. This article does not deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps

Tone and Balance: The content added is definitely neutral. However, I would recommend Zeke to talk about the Olympic history of certain teams other than the United States in order to be as unbiased as possible. There are no viewpoints that are over represented or under represented, and the content does not attempt to persuade the reader.

Sources and References: The new content does seem to be backed up by a reliable source of secondary information. However, from the second sentence of the first paragraph to the fifth sentence of the second paragraph there are no citations, leading me to assume that all this information is from the second source listed in the Bibliography which is the American hoops book. If that is not the case, then remember to always cite your source after you make a certain point. I remember that one of the Wikipedia lessons said that you should generally cite a source after every 1-2 sentences, so keep that in mind. The sources are all thorough, current, and very reliable. One of the sources is the website of the Olympics which is a great source to use if you are talking about the Olympics, and the two other sources are books written about basketball. The links do indeed work.

Organization: The content is well-structured, clear, and very easy to read. However, there are a few grammatical errors that need to be fixed. I will help you by pointing out that you used the word it's incorrectly. Remember that "it's" with an apostrophe means it is. The content is divided into separate paragraphs and well-organized

Overall Impressions: The content Zeke wants to add will definitely improve the quality of the article by making it more thorough and complete. Zeke made a great decision by choosing to talk about Olympic basketball history in a "Basketball History" article. Zeke also used great sources that are very reliable and relevant to his topic and the content he wants to add is very detailed and informative. However, the content can be improved by fixing the grammatical errors and by citing your sources after every point that you make. Right now, I am a little bit confused as to where you got some of your information from because you went over one paragraph without citing a source. Overall, you did a great job and I wish you the best of luck with editing your article