User:Fabiolabaeza465/Twilight (Campbell short story)/LofgrenSFSUenglish465 Peer Review

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Amazing job! The plot summary looks perfect and the four new sources you've added are good.

1. I would consider moving the underlined section in the intro to a new section called "Setting" or "dystopian themes" or something, because right now it's really crowding up the intro which should be only a short summary of the article. You could also expand on this section a little.

2. The critical reception section is really good. Good sourcing. It could be a little longer if there is more information in your source.

3. Try typing in google scholar "twilight campbell literary devices" and see what comes up. If analysis of the literature exists, it would be really good to include that in the article.

4. The sources you have are good. A couple more couldn't hurt.

5. If there are criticisms of Campbell's story, include them. Again, google scholar is a good tool. The sources you already found have additional info / analysis you can include. If these sources include additional descriptions of character you can include that too.

6. The information you added in the plot summary made it significantly clearer what the story is about.

7. Good unbiased tone.

Overall, what you have is really good. Finding one of two more sources and adding a additional section about setting, themes, or criticisms is my suggestion for improving it further. LofgrenSFSUenglish465 (talk) 22:09, 14 April 2021 (UTC)