User:Fairytails123/Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles (2003 TV series)/MeloVeiss Peer Review

NOTE FROM COURSE INSTRUCTOR: I agree that this is a good start, but also that it needs a lot more work. At this point it might be good to scale down the scope of the proposed contribution as it may be difficult to complete the work you thought you might be able to. But either way, I am also looking forward to the next draft. You have a good start to adding to the article. Your writing is neutral and just gives the facts from the show. I checked out the original Wikipedia page and you’re right, in the series overview it’s all over the place with plot points that happen each season so it’s nice that you’re going in and giving context. I’d like to see you cite specific episodes for the major plot points like you planned so people can know when they happened. It’s also good that you’re adding to the character bios since they’re pretty bare bones at the moment. I’d like to see three sentences for each of the main characters since they deserve more than a sentence. Otherwise, I’m looking forward to your next draft.

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