User:Faith.amaris/Vandalism of art/Josephrkopta Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Faith.amaris


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Faith.amaris/Vandalism_of_art


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Vandalism of art

Lead
My question is whether your new content should go into the lead, or if you should put it into the body of the existing article. In some ways, the inclusion of the Cairo protests and last year's US protests leading to "vandalism" are good examples, but the lead should concisely reflect the content of the article as a whole. This means that maybe your new content might better go under the already existing section "As Political Protest." You also don't want to make the lead overly detailed.

Content
I think the inclusion of "art vandalism" in Cairo in 2011 and in the US in 2020-21 are great inclusions, but I think they need to be expanded. What qualifies these instances as vandalism, and not a "creative act" in the way that the Erased de Kooning was seen as a creative act?

You might find the videos for Week 5 useful, in that vandalism is discussed in many ways.

Tone and Balance
I slightly edited your sandbox draft to have a more neutral tone. Wikipedia does not allow first-person voice (I, we) to be used, so I put them in the third person.

Sources and References
My biggest concern for this first draft is that none of the three references that you consult are scholarly or peer-reviewed, but rather newspaper/journal articles. There is a possibility that your new content will be rejected by Wikipedia if it isn't backed up by credible sources. I'd encourage you to take some time to look for scholarly (meaning, peer-reviewed) sources through Temple Libraries (refer to Tom Ipri's slides under "Announcements" on Canvas, or make an appointment with me or directly with Tom for help finding scholarly resources).

Images and Media
After you post your new content to Wikipedia this week, one thing that would be nice to see are some images describing your new content (either from Cairo or the US). The tricky part is going to be making sure that any images are in the public domain (or they will be taken down from Wikipedia by copyright holders). The training module for this week about uploading images will help you with this.