User:Familyfare/Wari Empire/CCNorthfield Peer Review

General info
Caden15436
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Familyfare/Wari Empire
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Wari Empire

Evaluate the drafted changes
The original Wikipedia page is extremely limited in its depth and scope. There are only three sections, none of which are particularly impressive. Furthermore, there are multiple uncited facts that should be removed and/or properly attributed.

In the sandbox, Caden15436 has made important contributions to the article. The War, Conflict, and Imperialism section is a much needed contribution to the Wiki. Facts seem to be properly cited, and the material used all come from scholarly sources. In terms of areas of improvement, I would recommend reviewing the sentence structure of the first paragraph; the flow of the first sentence is a little choppy, and the subsequent two may benefit from varied structure (change the start from "it is").

For the future, I would recommend reviewing the "Debate on empire" and "political relations" sections. There are still some unattributed facts, and you could delete or provide citations for these sentences. Additionally, the lead section could be bolstered with references to the sections you created. Finally, per our discussion, maybe some images, charts, or graphs would make your article more interesting and readable.

Overall, great job! Your contributions are helping turn this underdeveloped article to a legitimate source. Keep up the good work :)