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Article we are editing: TOMS Shoes

Okay guys, so the sandbox is finally working now. We can start posting the parts of the article that we've edited on here. Farahqube (talk) 17:16, 28 March 2012 (UTC)

(Kaysobala (talk) 17:59, 28 March 2012 (UTC)) okay im gonna be working on the section "Current projects" about the eye wear launch, but it will not be up until later because I'm going to be at work.

i have intro done. will post it up later when i seee you guys so you can edit it.Melaniesilva1 (talk) 18:15, 28 March 2012 (UTC)

Farahqube (talk) 21:34, 28 March 2012 (UTC) okay sounds good...do you think I should paste the full article on here and then we can add in our parts in bold or (brackets)?? Would that be a good idea? and when we meet tonight we can just read over it and finalize?

Farahqube (talk) 23:54, 28 March 2012 (UTC)This looks more organized!

Melaniesilva1 (talk) 01:03, 29 March 2012 (UTC)hey farah, for your editing part i found some more information we can incorporate. there are other diseases mentioned on the toms website that they try to prevent such as dangerous debris, jiggers, and hookworms. do you suggest we incorporate these as well?

Farahqube (talk) 01:28, 29 March 2012 (UTC) Good observation Mel! Yes we should incorporate these diseases as well...but where do you suggest adding them?

Melaniesilva1 (talk) 01:31, 29 March 2012 (UTC)maybe on your second paragraph where it says "why shoes?" ..what do you think? maybe we can even put all the diseases there and make it a list with bulliten points so it is organized better. what you think?

Farahqube (talk) 01:36, 29 March 2012 (UTC) Yea I agree. I think I should add that before the sentence starting with "Simply wearing shoes..." since I would still have reasons for how shoes can prevent many diseases. Can you post the link of the page where you found the names please?

Melaniesilva1 (talk) 01:40, 29 March 2012 (UTC) yes, its http://www.onedaywithoutshoes.com/learn-more. when you put your mouse on each different disease it tells you how many people are affected and what the disease is so you can take that info for each bullet point.

Farahqube (talk) 01:47, 29 March 2012 (UTC)Thank you! I will take a look at that. BTW, I noticed that the time and date next to our username is incorrect. It says March 29th but it is March 28th...

Melaniesilva1 (talk) 01:51, 29 March 2012 (UTC) ya, thats wierd. how do we change that? well this is how you can go about your information:

reasons why... : 1)jiggers: information on jiggers (one or 2 sentences)

2)hookworms : info

etc ....

Farahqube (talk) 10:07, 29 March 2012 (UTC)Yea I will add that, but I think I should still keep it in paragraph format instead of bullet points.

Melaniesilva1 (talk) 10:08, 29 March 2012 (UTC)okay! sounds

Farahqube (talk) 03:32, 29 March 2012 (UTC) I just added the information about the diseases. To let you guys know...if you put a term in between these  brackets, the term gets linked to its Wikipedia page!

(Kaysobala (talk) 03:48, 29 March 2012 (UTC))okay thats good to know, i just finished up my part about current projects and now im going to continue on the shoe drops section:) your background section looks good as well as your paragraph about manufacturing! good job!

Farahqube (talk) 03:57, 29 March 2012 (UTC)Thanks Kayla. I just read your current projects section, and it looks good! I just have some suggestions...I think you should put a comma right after Nepal on your first sentence. And also maybe use Blake's last name as well to make it more formal. Also, for your second last sentence, I think there should be a comma after therefore and after 2011, but remove the comma after launched. What do you think?

(Kaysobala (talk) 04:04, 29 March 2012 (UTC)) thats really great advice, thanks for the suggestions :)

Farahqube (talk) 13:44, 29 March 2012 (UTC)Hey guys, I just made very minor edits to the section "Vagabond Tour" I will bold my changes.

In early 2009, the second Vagabond Tour was launched. The Vagabond Tour was sponsored by Dave Matthews Band, and it aimed to reach campuses across the United States. The tour began on February 23 and ended on May 15. Volunteers were broken up into five regional teams (SW, NW, NE, SE, and MW/TX) in an effort to reach different campuses nation-wide and to spread information regarding TOMS One for One movement.

Original Introduction
TOMS Shoes is a for-profit company based in Santa Monica, California, that also operates a non-profit subsidiary, Friends of TOMS. The company was founded in 2006 by Blake Mycoskie, an entrepreneur from Arlington, Texas. The company designs and sells lightweight shoes based on the Argentine alpargata design. With every product sold, TOMS will donate a pair to a person in need.

Melanie's edited Introduction
TOMS shoes, a for-profit company located in Santa Monica, California, was created in 2006 by entrepreneur, Blake Mycoskie. The company aims to provide shoes for children in developing countries who are in desperate need. By following their One for One Movement, TOMS promises that for every product they sell, they will donate a pair to a child in need; one for one. The company designs and sells their lightweight shoes based on the Argentine alpargata design. Today, TOMS supplies their donations to over 20 countries, and continues to ensure that their shoes protect the health, education, and hygiene of deprived children by working with charitable partners. TOMS also operates on a non-profit subsidiary, Friends of TOMS, which is meant to attract the attention of volunteers who would like to help out with Mycoskie’s one-for-one mission.

Blake Mycoskie had already been starting five separate businesses before he introduced his most recent company, TOMS. His main drive when working on a business is to follow his motto; “Giving is what fuels us. Giving is our future.” TOMS customers have the ability to view and purchase products they desire on the company’s website, toms.com, as well as in stores. TOMS shoes are sold, on average,between $50 to $100 Canadian, depending on the kind of shoe that is being purchased. Customers can also purchase other items such as tees, hats and accessories in order to support TOMS.

Original background section
After his visit to Argentina in 2006, Mycoskie decided to get involved in shoe giving. Considering sustainability, he concluded that starting a business rather than a charity would help his impact last longer. In his speech at the Second Annual Clinton Global Initiative, Mycoskie recalled that children without shoes were not only susceptible to health risks, but were not allowed to go to school. When asked "why shoes?" Mycoskie's main reason is a disease called podoconiosis, a debilitating and disfiguring disease. Also known as "Mossy Foot", podoconiosis is a form of elephantiasis that affects the lymphatic system of the lower legs. It is a soil-transmitted disease caused by walking in silica-rich soil. This causes one's feet to swell along with many other health implications. Shoes are the most basic solution to many of these health risks. Mycoskie emphasizes that his company's goal is to not only give shoes, but to also educate others on the importance of wearing shoes.

Background section revised by Farah
While on a visit to Argentina in 2006, Blake Mycoskie witnessed many hardships of Argentinean children growing up barefoot. He felt the need to help, and that is when the One for One shoe giving movement was born. Considering sustainability, Mycoskie decided to start a business rather than a charity because it would help his impact last longer. In his speech at the Second Annual Clinton Global Initiative, Mycoskie stated that children without shoes are not only susceptible to health risks, but are also not allowed to go to school. Many children in developing countries cannot attend school barefoot because shoes are a required part of the uniform. This means that these children do not receive an education; as a result, they do not have the opportunity to realize their full potential.

When asked "why shoes?” One of Mycoskie’s main reasons is also a disease called podoconiosis, a debilitating and disfiguring disease which can penetrate through bare feet. It is also known as "Mossy Foot", and it is a form of elephantiasis that affects the lymphatic system of the lower legs. Podoconiosis is a soil-transmitted disease which is caused by walking in silica-rich soil. Other preventable diseases include Hookworm, Jiggers, and dangerous debris. Hookworm can cause intestinal pain, weakness and cognitive impairment, and it affects 740,000,000 people around the world. Jiggers which are burrowing fleas that cause painful infection are also widespread in Kenya and have affected 1,890,000 Kenyan children. Likewise, in the Philippines, 30,000 people live on one landfill where many are without shoes and are exposed to broken glass, syringes and debris. By simply wearing shoes, many people in developing countries can overcome such diseases. Wearing shoes can also prevent feet from getting cuts and sores, which are not only painful for children but also very dangerous if they become infected. Mycoskie also emphasizes that his company's goal is to not only give shoes, but to also educate others on the importance of wearing shoes.

Original manufacturing section
According to the corporate website, TOMS are currently manufactured in Argentina, China and Ethiopia.

Manufacturing section revised by Farah
According to the corporate website, TOMS currently manufactures in Argentina, China and Ethiopia.

TOMS aims to be as ethical and as fair as possible in regard to manufacturing practices. All factories sign a code of conduct which ensures to provide a clean and safe workplace, fair wages, equal treatment, and to never employ underage labour. The production staff of TOMS also routinely visits factories to ensure that they maintain an overall good quality of working standards. In addition, third parties audit the factories at least once a year to further ensure that they adhere to proper labour regulations.

Social enterprise original
For every pair of TOMS Shoes purchased, a pair of new shoes is given to a child in need. Over 1,000,000 pairs of shoes have been given to children under the One for One program since TOMS launched in 2006. The canvas shoes have been given to children in more than 20 countries worldwide, including the United States (Louisiana, Kentucky, Mississippi and Florida), Argentina, Ethiopia, Rwanda, Guatemala, Haiti, and South Africa. TOMS are sold at more than 500 stores nationwide and internationally, including Neiman Marcus, Nordstrom, and Whole Foods Market, which features styles made from recycled materials.

Social enterprise revised by Melanie
For every pair of TOMS Shoes purchased, a pair of new shoes is given to a child in need. In 2007, just one year of the company’s existence, TOMS sold 10,000 pairs of shoes. Today, Over 1,000,000 pairs of shoes have been given to children under the One for One program since TOMS launch in 2006. The canvas shoes have been given to children in more than 20 countries worldwide, including the United States (Louisiana, Kentucky, Mississippi and Florida), Argentina, Ethiopia, Rwanda, Guatemala, Haiti, and South Africa. TOMS are sold at more than 500 stores nationwide and internationally, including Neiman Marcus, Nordstrom, and Whole Foods Market, which features styles made from recycled materials. Also, to raise awareness, TOMS picks a specific day in April each year, and asks individuals to walk around barefoot on this particular day. During this One Day Without Shoes Campaign, individuals get the chance to live the lives of children that go without shoes daily in order to see how significant shoes really are. In 2010, this movement was so successful that over a quarter of a million people participated in this act. This company is currently in touch with various kinds of social networks such as Youtube, Facebook, and Twitter, in order for their customers to see the company’s updated videos, and the information they tweet or share that discusses the continuous success TOMS achieves.

Original Current Projects Section
In 2011 TOMS Eyewear was launched, using a similar model of one for one. For every pair of glasses sold, a child in need will receive either medical care, prescription glasses, or sight-saving surgery.

Revised Current Projects section by Kayla
There are basic human needs that are not being met in many countries around the world and while visiting Nepal, Blake Mycoskie (TOMS founder) realized that the simple human sense of sight was one of them. The company began to educate themselves on the issue leading to blindness and vision impairment and how this is affecting peoples lives. In order to accomplish their new goal of supplying unfortunate villages with eye care help, TOMS set out on partnering up with experts in the eyewear industry and non – profit organizations to provide assistance. While on their search they found Seva Foundation, who builds sustainable eye wear clinics in developing countries. The two worked closely in partnership to provide the unfortunate locals with proper medical treatment, such as eye surgery and simply a new pair of prescription eyeglasses. Therefore, in 2011, TOMS Eyewear was launched using a similar model as One for One. For every pair of glasses sold, a child in need will receive medical care, prescription glasses, or sight-saving surgery.

Original Shoe Drops Section
With help from 501(c)(3) non-profit organizations and non-governmental organizations (NGO's), TOMS is able to give shoes to children in need year-round. The non-profit organization Friends of TOMS also coordinates "Shoe Drops" around the world for employees and volunteers to experience TOMS giving first-hand. A shoe drop in early 2009 in Uruguay was filmed to be included as part of a national AT&T commercial. Volunteer opportunities are open to the public. Volunteers on shoe drops are able to hand-deliver shoes to children. TOMS currently gives in over 20 countries.

revised Shoe Drops Section by Kayla
With help from 501(c)(3) non-profit organizations and non-governmental organizations (NGO's), TOMS is able to give shoes to children in need year-round. The non-profit organization Friends of TOMS also coordinates "Shoe Drops" around the world for employees and volunteers to experience TOMS giving first-hand. A shoe drop in early 2009 in Uruguay, was filmed to be included as part of a national AT&T commercial. Volunteer opportunities are open to the public and give the volunteers the privilege to hand-deliver shoes to children during the shoe drop. TOMS currently identified over 20 countries as needing help in providing children with a new pair of TOMS shoes. By identifying a specific village or town, TOMS is able to reach out to each individual in need, keeping him or her safe and healthy in their own community. Once a community is identified TOMS is committed to that town, continuously giving back to the growing children year after year.