User:Fassbender0128/Alice in Wonderland Syndrome/Percys0818 Peer Review

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(Fassbender0128)
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 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Fassbender0128/Alice_in_Wonderland_Syndrome?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Alice in Wonderland syndrome

Evaluate the drafted changes
Review by section:

Classification section (table with symptoms)

Really well organized/comphrensible breakdown. The only note I would have is that it might be benefincal to add citations for terms/sections that do not have wikipedia linksn (Tachysensia/Complications Section, Duration, and the other names section). I think it would be also good to flush out show exactly vision is impaired for the complications section.

Prognosis


 * I think the first line reads as more of an opinion than a decription of the prognosis. Perhaps it could be moved later/modified to use language that is less connotational and based in patient data (ex. "patients generally do not report fear/harm in their symptom experience).
 * A citation would be really good for that as well! For this line "In many cases, the intensity of the episodes and symptoms decline." I think it would be good to reflect the timeline of this declination and any contributing factors.
 * Small style note: using the acronym just once feels inconsistent, I would recommend sticking to the full form to reflect the rest of the page.
 * I think this sentence "Some cases include reoccurring symptoms in which other medical conditions have to be ruled out before diagnosing AIWS" would fit better in the second paragraph.
 * For this sentence "Limitations of Alice in Wonderland syndrome are due to the rarity of having the disorder, making this rare syndrome under diagnosed due to its rarity" do you means to say "Limitations in prognosis of Alice in Wonderland syndrome"
 * This sentence has misspellings "These manaifestations and disortions is why medication is then introduced but have some inducing effects"

Treatment


 * For "Test including eectroencephalogram (EEG) and magnetic resonance imaging (MRI) are used to view brain aciitvity to examine possible brain injury or deficits." should it be "tests"? And also activity is misspelled.
 * This section "Since symptoms of Alice in Wonderland syndrome often disappear, either spontaneously on their own, or with the treatment of the underlying disease, most clinical and non-clinical Alice in Wonderland Syndrome cases are considered to be benign. In cases of Alice in Wonderland syndrome caused by underlying chronic disease, however, symptoms tend to reappear during the active phase of the underlying cause (e.g., migraine, epilepsy)." is great! I would just add citations as that information is very specific and it would be good to know the source.
 * For this section "In 2011, a patient was examined for having verbal auditory hallucinations (VAHs) and functional MRI (fMRI) was employed to localize cerebral activity during self-reported VAHs. Repetitive transcranial magnetic stimulation (rTSMS) was used on the patient's Brodmann's area 40, in charge of meaning and phonology, at a frequency of 1 Hz at T3P3. After the second week of treatment, all VAHs and sensory distortions have no effected on the patient and went through a full remission. Follow up appointments were conducted with no signs of any symptoms. By month 8, the symptoms returned. A second treatment was done with complete remission. [14]" since you are using a case study I think it would be good to include information of whether this treatment method has been replicated/is more widely used now.

Visual distortions

This section is great! The only notes I have is 1) for this sentence "Other distortions include teleopsia, objects are perceived further than they actually are, and pelopsia, objects are percieved closer than they actually are." putting the definitions in parenthesizes might improve flow and also 2) it seems a sentence about Gulliver's syndrome was started but not finished.

Depersonalization


 * It would be beneficial to establish that the "disconnection from one's own body, feelings, thoughts, and environment" described in the first sentence is depersonalization/derealization.
 * Adding a citation for the sentence describing depersonalization would be great!
 * There are multiple spelling errors in this section

Migraines section

This section has great information. My only notes are that 1) I think you should include more citations, especially for the very specific information and 2) the flow is a little choppy.

Overall

This is great! It seems that you have really enhanced the comphrensivness of this article! I think it just requires a quick edit to address spelling concerns, improve flow, and incorporate more citations.