User:Fatehazannath/Abel Wolman/Backbrush Peer Review

What's done well:

The article is well-cited throughout its paragraphs, and the links were working links, though some only provided an abstract (such as https://pubs.acs.org/doi/pdf/10.1021/ie50111a013). It is a very thorough article that hits on the important aspects of Wolman's life and contributions, and provided a lot of links for further learning about his associated subjects. I believe the article is well-organized, and like how the contents shows everything in order:


 * 1Biography
 * 1.1Early life and education
 * 1.2Career
 * 1.3Personal life and death
 * 2Major accomplishments
 * 2.1Research Publications
 * 2.1.1"Chlorine Absorption and the Chlorination of Water" (Sept. 1918)
 * 2.2Honors and awards
 * 3Legacy
 * 3.1Academic and Social Tributes
 * 4See also
 * 5References
 * 6External links

Your article also covered the five elements in the exercise quite well!


 * A lead section that is easy to understand
 * I would just change a sentence in this lead, which I provided under "some changes or considerations". Otherwise, I was able to learn a lot about Wolman from your lead, but it was concise in that it didn't go too in-depth about his accomplishments and only mentioned what appears to be his biggest legacy (chlorination of municipal water supply).
 * A clear structure
 * As mentioned above, the order under contents was well-organized and I was able to easily navigate between subjects.
 * I liked the chronological structure of his biography
 * Balanced coverage
 * His career section is quite long, but it had valuable content. If there is anything else to add into his personal life and death it may look a bit more balanced, but it is arguably the most important to have a solid career section so I thought it was a good balance.
 * Neutral content
 * From what I've read from this article, there doesn't seem to be bias in the writing as there aren't any extreme words or "ultimates". The facts are just listed as they are.
 * Reliable sources
 * After clicking through some of your listed sources, I haven't found broken or "sketchy" links, and reading through them, they also did not sound biased or political.
 * After clicking through some of your listed sources, I haven't found broken or "sketchy" links, and reading through them, they also did not sound biased or political.

Some changes or considerations:

I noticed this sentence: "Wolman is best known for his breakthrough research, alongside his peer Linn Enslow, in the chlorination of Baltimore's municipal water supply, which has benefitted the municipal water supplies in other American cities and continues to contribute to the distribution of safe water globally" sounded a little awkward in the lead. It may flow better if a few of the commas are omitted as I had to pause to read the sentence.

It would also be nice to add a few further readings for anyone who would like to do more research on Wolman if available! I often draw them from JHU Catalyst.

Would the dormitory, Wolman Hall, be noteworthy enough to add a picture of? I did think that the media provided in this article is very relevant and helped enhance it.

What I learned:

Your article had a lot of embedded links leading to other articles, which I would love to put into my own article! It was really helpful to click on those links to see more information and provide more background.