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Reading List
* Hunter, Susan. (2003). "Black death": AIDS in Africa * Harriet A. Washington (2007) "Why Africa Fears Western Medicine", The New York Times

Original
HIV/AIDS is a major public health concern and cause of death in many parts of Africa. Although the continent is home to about 15.2 percent of the world's population, Sub-Saharan Africa alone accounted for an estimated 69 percent of all people living with HIV and 70 percent of all AIDS deaths in 2011.Countries in North Africa and the Horn of Africa have significantly lower prevalence rates, as their populations typically engage in fewer high-risk cultural patterns that have been implicated in the virus's spread in Sub-Saharan Africa.Southern Africa is the worst affected region on the continent. As of 2011, HIV has infected at least 10 percent of the population in Botswana, Lesotho, Malawi, Mozambique, Namibia, South Africa, Swaziland, Zambia, and Zimbabwe.

Revised
HIV/ AIDS is a major health problem and is the cause of many death in different parts of Africa. Although Africa is about 15.2 % of the world's population. Sub-Saharan by it's self accounts for approximately 69 percent of all living people with HIV and 70 percent of all the HIV/AIDS deaths in 2011. Countries in North Africa, South Africa, and other parts of Africa have extremely, significantly low rates, as their population start to grow and engage in fewer high-risk patterns that have been implicated in the virus that has spread in Sub-Saharan Africa. Southern Africa is the worst affected region on the continent. As of 2011, HIV/AIDS has infected more then 1+ thousands people in the United States and at least 10 percent of the population in Botswana, Lesotho, Malawi, Mozambique, Namibia, South Africa, Swaziland, Zambia, and Zimbabwe.

Original Contribution
HIV is the world's largest leading infectious killer. As of 2014, at least 78 million people are living with HIV/AIDS in the United States and only 39 million have died and not survive.