User:Femme02/sandbox

I fixed the mistakes I had in three of the citations/references.

Under Lead Section
The General Assembly Binding Women for Reforms, Integrity, Equality, Leadership, and Action (GABRIELA) is a leftist Filipino organization that advocates for women's issues. GABRIELA is one of many coalitions within the Philippines and their priority includes many women from different sectors and focuses on the education and team building of the women in order to advocate for the many issues they are facing.

Under History
The NGO was named in honor of Gabriela Silang, a revolutionary Filipina, who led a revolt against Spain in the second half of the eighteenth century. The death of her husband was the reason she took over his role as the anti-colonialist leader. GABRIELA has been a monumental party for Filipino women because they challenge a lot of the patriarchal views placed on them, alongside resisting foreign influence and neocolonialism.

Under Electoral Performance
The Gabriela Women’s Party was the only women’s party that was able to obtain a second term in Congress. In the 2007 elections, the GWP (Gabriela Women’s Party) made a lot of achievements when it came to representation in the election. A lot of women from different classes make up the Gabriela party, such as peasants, religion, housewives. It is important to note that many of the women who have been elected from the Gabriela Women's Party, are women who have survived abuse in their life.

Under Sex Trafficking
The Gabriela Women's Party launched a campaign against the sex trafficking issue of Filipino women and children which they called the Purple Rose Campaign. Not only do they have campaigns such as the Purple Rose Campaign, but GABRIELA is actively involved in Vow to Fight (VAW) which is the Vow to Fight Against Violence on Women and Free Our Sisters/Free Ourselves campaign.

Under GABRIELA USA and Gabriela Hong Kong
The Gabriela Women's Party is part of the a grassroots organization. This has led to many more GABRIELA's in other countries, such as the United States, the Netherlands, Japan, Hong Kong, Taiwan and Italy.

Bibliography Due 10/10
Book: Transnational Feminism and Globalization

This book provides insight in many organizations, including GABRIELA to shed light on the issues relating to gender, resistance and mobilization. This will be able to provide me with more information to add onto the history section due to the fact that their voices, being in a "Third World" country, are silenced so it shows the impact globalization has on them.

Scholarly Journal: Representations of Gender Inequality & Women's Issues in Philippine Feminist Discourse

This provides me insight on the women who were in other organizations that ended up forming the GABRIELA party. Since this group was a force in political activities, it will help add more background to the history section and even can be added to the lead section, as well.

Scholarly Journal: Wives, widows, and workers: Corazon Aquino, Imelda Marcos, and the Filipina "other"

This information gives me the beginnings of this party after the Spanish American War. The Gabriela party worked hard to draw attention to the imperialistic actions towards their people. This can help me add to the lead section, with a more accurate information and add more to the history section, as well.

Other Sources -- Need to look for more books & scholarly journals.
Newspaper: Purple Rose Campaign: Gabriela Network Fights for Women's Rights

Report/News: Filipino women's movement flourishes after Marcos

Magazine: GABRIELA in the Philippines; "Let Our Voices Be Heard"

Magazine: Women's Int'l Solidarity in the Philippines

Magazine: Philippine Women's Leader Speaks

Magazine: Politics of the Absurd

Magazine: Philippines: Women Bearing the Cross of Globalization

Interview with Ninotchka Rosca: Feminism's March from Nation to Home

Movie Review on Women in Action: Gabriela

Gabriela Women's Party
The wikipedia article I chose to expand on and contribute to is the Gabriela Women's Party. Being a Filipinx womxn, I felt very underrepresented when trying to search for a Filipino Women's article that could relate to our class. I also tend to feel underrepresented in many aspects of my life and I just want to do my best and my part in contributing to those parts of my life. One, is this article because there were so many resources I came across that were not utilized in the article. Also, the fact that the history section is so small. It just makes me feel like no one put enough effort into it. I have found many sources searching through the SDSU library database that I am filtering through to see what parts I want to use. I can definitely make a strong and informational history section that can be the starting point at creating a really good article. I also think I can add more information in the lead section to provide more insight for people who come across the page. I want to give this page more justice then it has been given.

I appreciate whoever decided to start the article, I just feel like there is so much to the topic that needs to be brought to light. At the end of the article, they just threw in the headings of Human Trafficking and GABRIELA USE and GABRIELA Hong Kong, but there were no thorough thoughts on them; one long sentence and that was it. My goal for this assignment is to really expand on the history part of the Gabriela Women's Party, and maybe just add a little to the lead section, but even after the assignment is over, I would really like to come back and make more sections and provide more information on the many aspects of the party.

Adding a citation
For my citation, I chose to add a reference to the Gender and Development article I had previously analyzed under the section: Gender and microfinance (para 18). The reason I chose to do this section is because while analyzing it, I realized there was just not enough information or at least there could be more information backing up what was being said. Another reason is because this week's reading had information on microfinance and I really understood the concept so I wanted to contribute some knowledge I gained from this reading and apply it in the article. The only thing is, I had to really figure out while reading that section: what was missing? and with the information I had, what paragraph would have more effect with the reference I added?

This week's reading in our class had a lot of information on microcredit and the history and effect it has had on women. I figured, instead of just adding a citation, that I would actually add a sentence and contribute so there was more information on it. Some of the information that was already in the section of microcredit/ microfinance, was not information I had read in our book. So I had to really read and consider what additional data I was going to contribute. I decided to add the data that Roodman and Moruch provided on page 106 of the book, which consisted of the fact that within the time that microfinance has been around, the evidence that related to the improvement in the "clients", to be exact, women's lives were slim to none. I felt like this was perfect to add because the information in the section had talked about some of the benefits women gained from microcredits and a couple examples to where they did not. So the one sentence I added just backed up the fact that, yes, in some ways microcredit has benefited women, but there is little evidence of it, so the cases they are going off of, are most likely the small amount of cases that ended positive.

Gender and Development Analysis
The wikipedia article Gender and Development, is a part of the WikiProject Gender Studies, which is constantly improving articles and their qualities that surrounds the topic of gender studies. The importance of this topic and these references being apart of the WikiProject, is that the material being used removes biases. The article is not yet rated within the scale of quality and importance. With the help of the talk page on this topic, the conversations and edits amongst people helped remove those gender biases. The article consists up the many different approaches, benefits and criticisms that lie within the gender and development framework. Alongside these approaches will also be the comparison between a few and in depth definition and examples which helps the reader get a better idea of the topic.

In the lead section, there is background information on the topic, but the last few sentences should speak more generally on the many different approaches or at least add alternative approaches within the text alongside the other main approaches. The reason I say this is because, just by reading the last couple sentences in the lead, it sounds like the only approaches that will be talked about are: “dominant liberal approaches, including WID, WAD, GAD and neoliberal frameworks” (para 1). Even if it is generalizing it, I think there should be more context as to why. I think the lead section could be restructured, almost similar to Women and the Environment, because it was written very well and even though they are different topics, I think Gender and Development lead section could be written a lot stronger. Since the body of the article has a lot of knowledge backed up by credible sources, the lead section should be a reflection of what the reader will be reading.

When it comes to style and formatting there are quite a few mistakes. To start off, by looking at the wikipedia article, the first thing shown is the tone and how it is not reflective of the way the writing should speak according to encyclopedia context. The tone of the article consists of redundancy within each paragraph; the common idea of having a thesis following with evidence is not considered “encyclopedia writing” (Tone, 2.7). This common writing is shown throughout the article, in most of the paragraphs of each section. Also, throughout the article, there are many grammatical errors. Considering there are many reference indicators after the sentences, the little mistakes add up and is something that can be fixed by re-reading each section. In the beginning of the article from  Early Approaches to Gender, financial crises, and neoliberal economic policy, the format is the same and is very easy to read along. The section right after, Smart economics, consists of the smaller header to be right with the text, instead of a separation (para 26). The way that is formatted is a lot to take in and does not look uniformed with the rest of the text. Other than that main section, the references check out and are fairly up to date, ranging from the 90’s into the 2000’s. There are a lot of citations which helps give more of a background to the terms and examples being used and they are cited throughout each paragraph.

In the first section, Early Approaches, the theoretical approach of the WID and GAD had an informative structure with multiple paragraphs that consisted of history and key ideas whereas WAD had a small introduction and then a paragraph under theoretical approaches (para 6-7). Combining those paragraphs would make the section look similar to the other two and it will make it easier and more understandable for readers. That is something that would need to be improved because the content is not balanced and uniformed so it looks like there was not a lot of effort put into explaining WAD. Besides that, the information given was not too much and it will be easy for readers to conceptualize. Even the wording of the information was fairly easy so the choice of words strengthens this section because each term involves a lot of unpacking, so the way it is worded makes it a lot more straightforward.

The section, Smart economics, alongside many of the other sections displays this concept of “info-dumping” and the excessive length which ends up not being concise. Since the format is different from the other sections, the information shows a lot more and it is easier to see that there are less paragraphs, but more sentences in the Theoretical approaches (para 26-28) and more paragraphs in Criticism (para 29-34). The structure of this section provides a lot of information but it is not in order so it looks like random information is being dumped into it, on top of the lengthy descriptions of each. Usually when paragraphs get longer, readers tend to stop reading because the main point is not being addressed in the beginning, which leads them to fish more to get it.

When looking at the Talk Page, it seems very helpful. Since this is the behind-the-scenes to the article, it gives better insight into the reasoning behind some of the headers and the text. A lot of people reference their sandbox when asserting the changes they have made. Also, the time in between posts are quite fast. The people who are editing the article are constantly checking up on it to get the most out of the article so I think that is impressive and a helpful tool. The Talk Page is not very long but people do take time to read and edit and help each other out and that is very important because they all have the same end goal.

Overall, the article of Gender and development, is a work in progress but is leading down a promising path. The information is there, just some improvements are needed. This information in this article is quite similar to what we had learned in our lecture on these topics, the article just goes a little more in depth and it also provides other approaches not just WID, WAD, and GAD. The article goes more in depth with the neoliberal frameworks and more information on each of the sub-topics. Since this topic tends to be biased, the use of the talk page and getting credible sources that can back up both sides of the argument helps strengthen this article. There is constant editing to make sure readers are getting the most out of what they are reading. With more researching and working together, this article will be a strong text.