User:Fensk110/Green sulfur bacteria/Winde068 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Fensk110


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Green sulfur bacteria sandbox draft


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Green sulfur bacteria

Evaluate the drafted changes
You've got a good start to your draft! After reading over the initial wiki page article, I saw that most of the paper could use additional info (excluding photosynthesis and carbon fixation sections) so you have a lot to work with. I also like the outline you made in your sandbox about things you should add! As for the characteristics section you've edited, you did a great job turning the bullet points from the original article into well written sentences that flush out the details a bit more. You could always add another image to this section so it captures the reader's attention.

In the habitat section, your second and third sentences are rather short, I'm sure you're still editing them but you could try to combine to make it flow better. I also saw your note about references being in your google doc just don't forget to put them in there at the end :)

How many species of green sulfur bacteria are there? I was just curious because you mention a few types in the habitat section. You may want to add how many species there are to the intro part.

Lastly, on the original page, the nitrogen fixation and mixotrophy sections are only a few sentences long. If you're looking for things to add - this would be a place to start.

Overall, I noticed that your writing is factual and is not trying to persuade me of something so that means you're doing it right!

Great work!

Natalie Windels