User:Figapartmenttoast/Almohad Caliphate/Gusagyemang Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Figapartmenttoast


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Figapartmenttoast/Almohad Caliphate


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Almohad Caliphate

Evaluate the drafted changes
There is no lead for the article. Is this because this is a section further down the entire page?

Is everything in the article relevant to the topic?

Yes. I found everything to be relevant to the topic.This is a good addition to the Art section of the page. You added a lot of history in a chronological manner which made it easier to read and follow. The contents are on topic as well clear and concise. Overall, the contents of this passage is good and the presentation of information is easy to read and understand.

'''Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?'''

Most of the article is neutral. in. the third paragraph, a few of the sentences were not cited so it could seem like there were not supported claims. Other than that, the article was not biased or unsupported.

'''Check the citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?'''

The sources are mostly books and I was able to find them from your references. From what I saw, the sources support the claims they are cited next to in the text. The timeline of the citations are varied and there is a recent one (2016), which is good.

Minor changes:

As a reader, the ending was abrupt and I think the last paragraph should be fleshed out more if possible. In particular, what is the tradition that the manuscript depart from? What are some of the new changes in the manuscript?

Add links to polychromy (paragraph 1), vellum (paragraph 2) and Maghrebi mabsūt script and the Qu'ran Abu Hafs al-Murtada if there are any.