User:Filmfanatic88/Notable Figures in the Discovery of the Germ Theory of Disease/Jules2992 Peer Review

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This will(COMMA) therefore (COMMA) not be a comprehensive list as the writing is on-going, but will give you the opportunity to see some of the sources used. I would add commas around the world therefore or I would just remove that word in general.

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 * 1) Historical Context and Introduction: The initial paragraph provides important historical context by introducing Ignaz Semmelweis as a Hungarian obstetrician working at Vienna General Hospital's maternity clinics in the mid-19th century. This effectively sets the stage for the subsequent discussion.
 * 2) Childbed Fever: The text adequately describes childbed fever as a febrile illness occurring in the first few days after childbirth. It accurately highlights the symptoms and severity of the condition, as well as the high mortality rates associated with it during the 1840s.
 * 3) Mortality Rates and Comparison of Clinics: The mention of a significantly lower mortality rate in the midwife clinic compared to the physician- and student-run clinic is a crucial point. It would be helpful to provide specific statistics or numbers to quantify the difference, if available, to add more weight to the observation.
 * 4) Semmelweis's Investigation: The text mentions Semmelweis's detailed examination of the techniques and practices used in both clinics. This is an essential aspect of Semmelweis's work and his attempt to identify the factors contributing to the different mortality rates. However, the paragraph lacks specific details on his investigation methods or any findings beyond his conclusion that the same procedures and practices were utilized in both clinics.

To enhance the section, consider including further details on Semmelweis's investigation, such as his careful observation of hygiene practices, sanitary conditions, or any potential differences in the handling of patients or equipment. Additionally, providing information on Semmelweis's further actions or his eventual discovery of the significance of hand hygiene in preventing childbed fever would be valuable.

Overall, the content provided a good introduction to Ignaz Semmelweis and the issue of childbed fever. Expanding on Semmelweis's investigation and findings would strengthen the section, providing a more comprehensive understanding of his contributions to the field of obstetrics and his role in improving hygiene practices in healthcare settings.

"Ignaz Semmelweis was a Hungarian Obstetrician who began assisting Johann Klein at Vienna General Hospital's first two maternity clinics (also called a "lying-in wards") in 1846. Semmelweis became concerned with the number of women dying from a febrile illness called puerperal fever, but it was colloquially referred to as "Childbed fever." Childbed fever often occurred in the first few days after giving birth. This condition caused fever, intense abdominal pains, profound weakness, and ultimately death for many who acquired it. In the 1840s, when Ignaz Semmelweis began his career in obstetrics, an expectant mother entering a maternity ward had a 10-20% chance of dying from this particular illness/complication. For some areas in Europe the figure was greater with an estimated death rate as high as 30%. Childbed fever was an epidemic at the time which made labor and delivery a major cause of distress for families.

One of the clinics he oversaw was run by physicians and medical students, while the other was operated by midwives. Semmelweis noticed the midwife clinic had a significantly lower mortality rate. This compelled Semmelweis to study the techniques and practices of both clinics in great detail to find the distinguishing factors between the two. Detailed autopsies of the women who died on the ward were performed in the mornings at the clinic. Despite his attempts to find a major difference between the clinics, Semmelweis concluded the same procedures and practices were used at both clinics."