User:Fiona Lupi/Gating (electrophysiology)/Porter2226 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username) - Fiona Lupi's article on Gating (electrophysiology)
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: Gating (electrophysiology)

Lead evaluation
The lead is informative, concise, and neutral. Without going into too much detail, it introduces the article in much of the same manner as an academic abstract. A diagram of some form (if available) would serve well in the lead and help to break up the text chunk. The lead is also clearly written for both scientists and non-scientists.

Content and sources evaluation
The content is not as strong as the lead. It is more complicated and non explained as well. I would like to see more of an emphasis placed on explaining each concept more clearly. For example, the Na+ Channels section does not explain anything beyond the short summary of activation and even that is difficult to understand. While much of my comments on the content thus far may come across as harsh, I do quite enjoy the sources and most of the existing content. With some rewriting, the article will be great.

Tone and balance evaluation
I don't see any issues with tone. I do have concerns about the focus on activation compared with the short blurbs on deactivation and inactivation. It does seem as though those would benefit would additional text. Generally though, you all strike an excellent neutral tone and each section seems well balanced. It is just a matter on adding some material to better balance the overall article.

Overall evaluation
Anyone looking for information of electrophysiological gating would be comforted to find your article. While it does have several areas of improvement, its strengths are also quite evident and already make it an excellent resource for the public. With some additional tweaking and writing, I expect to see your article in fantastic shape. Overall, you should all congratulate yourselves on your work so far and hunker down to produce the phenomenal resource that I know this article will be. Great job!