User:Fishratthings/Predictive adaptive response/Nachpark1 Peer Review

Lead:

The introduction is very wordy. An introduction is to provide information about what you will be discussing later on in the article. The examples that are used should start in the body paragraphs or whichever topics you are using. The hypothesis theory should have its own paragraph and not described in the introduction. I would introduce the hypothesis and then talk about it in a different area of the paper. As stated above, an introduction is to introduce a topic you are going to discuss and then going in detail about it later on in the article.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Fishratthings


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Fishratthings/Predictive_adaptive_response?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Predictive adaptive response

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)