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Article feedback: Reem

I think you did a great job making the original article more readable. I made a few suggestions in the google doc about additions you could make about the headdress as well as the media coverage of the tomb.

Might be worth noting that little is known about her life, since it’s a bit unusual for a bio to only be about death

Is there anything else to say able the cylinder seal? (Like even what it would have been used for— something to give us more insight to her life pre-dying)

Do you think the pit could be said to raise important questions about Mesopotamian society and culture more than “reveal important information”? From what I remember it seemed this was a bit of a mystery/archeological anomaly --- It could be worth noting the rarity of this type of find for the region

The woman in the death pit who is more adorned than the others confused me— not Puabi right? Maybe you could flesh out some theories about who she was or explain the context a bit more if possible.

The cause of death section is a little confusing bc it’s referring to everyone in the pits except Puabi I think, so maybe it could go with the “Death pit” section? Is there any information on how she herself died?

The tone of the article seems right on, I can’t see anything you’ve added as likely to be flagged+ Citations look 10/10