User:Flowerflee/Colville River (Washington)/Addylynr Peer Review

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User:Flowerflee
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Flowerflee/Colville River (Washington)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Colville River (Washington)

Evaluate the drafted changes
This article is very well-written. Your ideas are well-organized and not repetitive. My biggest suggestion is to remove the thesis statement in your lead paragraph and the topic sentences of your body paragraphs. These sentences are repetitive and do not provide additional information or context. I suggest you skip them and start with new information.

"This area typically has a warm and dry climate as a result of the Cascade Mountains to the west and the Rocky Mountains to the north and east of the watershed. These mountain ranges act as a barrier to both wet marine air and extreme cold air coming from the north." I found these two sentences to be very confusing while reading, so I would suggest a rewrite. I would end the sentence after 'climate' and start a new sentence about how the climate is affected by other mountain ranges.

I would also double-check that you have commas in all of the necessary places. I noticed a couple of introductory phrases, such as 'on average,' do not include commas.

Otherwise, great job! Addylynr (talk) 04:53, 4 December 2023 (UTC)