User:Fmsrlyams/Kom people (Cameroon)/Desmondx2000 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Whose work are you reviewing? Fmsrlyams
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User
 * Fmsrlyams/Kom_people_%28Cameroon%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Kom people (Cameroon)
 * Kom people (Cameroon)

Evaluate the drafted changes[edit]
Lead Section: In this section I see that you reviewed some of the links that were provided and made not that they were inaccurate and needs to be corrected. I would to see the corrected versions along with some more information added in to give more weight. Incorporating some background on the capital, spiritual practices and beliefs could also be worth looking into to speak about the origins and how they came to be

Tone and Balance: From what I can gather your tone seems good but due to how little information is provided the tone feels uniformed in a lot places and that causes some confusion in fully understanding. What you added to the agriculture, economics, and spirituality section balanced out the visual format of the page.

Content: The content is brief, concise, and beneficial to the information you have. But that also could be touch up and refined

Sources: Their's a good mix of past and current sources which is good and we can see how the knowledge and research about them has evolved, but do I also think a few more sources could help give more weight to them and have more variety.

Organization: The layout was easy to follow along with although I think the pictures and how their arranged could be cleaned up and it will provide a much neater display.

Overall, you have a solid start and the information and revisions you've done far have been beneficial, but adding more context, background, and knowledge to these sections would be helpful to your additions in the future.



Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)