User:Fnt7/Vivaro-Alpine dialect/NikkiBeanz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Fnt7


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Fnt7/Vivaro-Alpine dialect
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Vivaro-Alpine dialect

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * The lead was a tad difficult to reading in the beginning, specifically the part that says "is a UNESCO Atlas of World's languages in danger severely endangered variety of the Occitan dialect found in the Occitan Valleys of northwestern Italy (Piedmont and Liguria)". As a general reader, it was confusing and could confuse potential readers, but other than that I felt I could get a grasp of the language with the added material. The lead also mentioned music with its last sentence however there wasn't much on music as compared to other things in the lead. It is a good brief introduction of the entire page.

Content/ Organization


 * Content is mostly relevant and up to date. There was also a substantial amount of information and sub topics fadded to the page including phonology and sound, grammar, vocabulary, and writing system. I feel as though grammar, vocabulary, and writing systems can under the same subtopic since they're kind of short and bare on their own. They are easy to understand as a general reader

Tone and Balance


 * The content is relatively neutral with a clear neutral tone throughout the entire article. There is no sense of persuasion or biased viewpoints which is a good sign of a wikipedia article.

Sources and References


 * I see lots of references that all connect to various points in the article. There are a variety of references that are all relatively recent and most of what I see is connected to an article in some way so there isn't a sense of making things up.

Overall Impressions


 * Overall I felt this article was a good size and provided a lot more information compared to the original article. It feels more complete too. I was able to get a grasp of the language and it was nice reading the culture section, however with that I think you could expand the lead a little more with a little more information on culture since there was a large section dedicated to that later in the article, but it was a super short sentence in the lead.