User:Football1144/Tesla Energy/PineconePicker777 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username): Football1144


 * Link to draft you're reviewing: NAS 348 Global Climate Change Syllabus - Spring 2023(8).docx
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Tesla Energy - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Tesla Energy - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
First paragraph is introductory and is therefore unnecessary for this Wikipedia article as it already has an introduction.

Second paragraph includes the phrase as "In this article..." referred to the work cited, which is out of place in Wikipedia articles.

In the third paragraph, what is the plan to save planet earth that was mentioned? This segment feels somewhat non-neutral. Word choice feels inconsistent with article's tone.

I currently have no recommendations for alternatives, these are just things that I feel are off, as a reader and a reviewer.

Otherwise, facts and stats add credibility, which is good.