User:Footpathandstile/Farangi-Sazi/Amelie Pak Peer Review

Questions from Canvas assignment outline:
 * 1) First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?
 * 2) The article does a good job at identifying and defining Farangi-Sazi and when it emerged. It broadly covers where these paintings occur and the content they portray. For being a short article, the quality of what is present is tonally neutral and content-wise succinct and effective.
 * 3) What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?
 * 4) More context surrounding this painting style would be helpful because it would explain why Farang-Sazi paintings were commissioned, who were to view the images, and why certain scenes were depicted. This would be an improvement because it makes the article more specific and clarifies the scope.
 * 5) What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?
 * 6) The most important thing that can be done with this article I'd say is expansion. I don't know enough about this painting style to pin-point what can be elaborated on, but additions on how the style emerged, why it did, who it was for, and what it meant would enhance the article holistically because it draws connections instead of only identifying.
 * 7) Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!
 * 8) I don't see much connection between this article and my own, but I would tap into Persian miniatures while reviewing/revising this article!
 * 9) Extra Comments:
 * 10) Direction of bibliography looks good and sources seem credible

General info
Footpathandstile's Article that had the most additions by LouisAragon
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Dne
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Farangi-Sazi

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)