User:Forcedtoeditforclass/Female Prostitution During the HIV/AIDS Crisis in the United States/BestofLAandBay Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Forcedtoeditforclass


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Female prostitution during the HIV/AIDS crisis in the United States.
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Female Prostitution During the HIV/AIDS Crisis in the United States
 * Female Prostitution During the HIV/AIDS Crisis in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Her sandbox draft is crafted well enough that she directly suggests what she is trying to convey. She includes statistics and numbers that do express the accurate quantitative data she writes about. However, I would encourage the student to define what "the mythic prostitute" means in  correlation to what she is talking about in her subheading section of legislation. Did the student include any additional information on her behalf? Overall, she listed her pouts clearly and thoughtfully.