User:Forclassaccount/Alice Walker/Melyle Peer Review

Peer review
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General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Forclassaccount, Danielle M
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Forclassaccount/Alice Walker

Overall evaluation:
Thanks for your contributions to the Alice Walker Wiki page. I really enjoyed reading your additions and think that you have a great start in terms of trying to incorporate other books, essays and literary works to show just how much of an impact Alice Walker has had on American literature. At the current stage of reading the Wiki page, I can't see what books you have cited to it is a little tricky to provide feedback on that section, but I appreciate you expanding on the texts that are currently offered on the page. I think you are right on trying to add to the Womanist section because as is, that section seems to be lacking. I wonder if you explore the differences between Black Feminism and Womanism and Africana Womanism in these sections using our readings from class. I think it would be interesting to bring in Patricia Hill Collins article about the usefulness of debating terminology (What's in a name?). And perhaps the differences of Alice Walker's writings about womanism and the other interpretations of womanism. And the questions she asks around lost creativity and her tribute to mothers that nurtured creativity in their children but will never be named. I liked your additions to the section regarding The Color Purple Movie. I think this is maybe a less known fact to incorporate. Do you have any citations for that section? Are there any quotes that Alice Walker made regarding the movie that you could incorporate into that section! You're doing great- Thanks for the opportunity to review! I have additional comments below.

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Yes, Danielle introduces Alice walker as a writer and Black feminist/womanist.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? I think it could be a little more concise and accurate including her work as an organizer and activist as well as a writer and intellectual.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? No
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? Since I think you are intending to detail each literary work in the body of the article, it would be useful to introduce each text and when it was written in the introduction.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? Concise.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes, the article already includes much about Alice Walker's earlier life and the pieces you've added are her literary contributions and intellectual contributions (womanism)
 * Is the content added up-to-date? For the most part! I think you could include some recent articles that analyze her work and perhaps recent debates on womanism versus Black feminism
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? I think there could be a section on her most recent collection of poetry: Taking the Arrow out of the Heart (published in 2016)
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? Yes!

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? I think there are some areas you could change the language to present the information in more neutral terms. For example: "Alice Walker is well known for her book  but her other literary works deserve the same acclaim" could be changed to "Alice Walker is best known for her book, The Color Purple. However, her other novels, essays, and poetry also had a great impact on readers across the world..."
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? The section on the Movie is read as biased but I don't think the content is bias. I would just reframe the way you present the information. Changing: "therefore the story could not be told without exploitation." to "Many believe that without a Black woman directing the film, the story could not be portrayed accurately, contributing to further cooptation and exploitation of Black characters, writers, and narratives..." or something like that? But you definitely need a citation for a claim like that.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? I think you could really lean into the womanist and Black feminist debate in that section more. I think you could also use memorable quotes from Walker's literary works to describe how she has shifted the narrative about feminism/womanism or other ideas, stereotypes etc.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? no.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? I can't see the sources that you've tagged so I can't answer this. I think there are some claims that do not have sources that need them, specifically around the movie.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? I can't see sources.
 * Are the sources current? NA
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? NA
 * Check a few links. Do they work? None of the links work and the sources are not included as is.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? A few sentence structure issues and a few missing commas. For example: "Her books have shared the unclaimed stories of generations of Black Ladies." This is pretty informal writing. Is there are more concise way of saying the same thing?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? I can see the structure you are attempting- which is great! I think adding more content to each section and detailing how each of her books influenced American Lit or greater society would be helpful. Adding language to connect the dots between each section.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? No
 * Are images well-captioned? Na
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? na
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? na

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject? no because I can't see the sources
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject? I would do a basic search on Academic Search Premier and Google Scholar to see if you've missed any recent articles written about Alice Walker so you can add a section for readers to go to for more information. Additional Scholarship on Alice Walker could be the headline for that section.
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles? It's hard to see where you are intending to drop this information in the actual article. I would in your sandbox try to paste the whole article (including your additions) and then edit so that it can be read as one piece. That way you can see more clearly what is missing.
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable? No, there is opportunities to link to different articles in the Womanist section, and the book section

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? The article is definitely more complete with these additions, I think you could add more to each section to bring it to the next level!
 * What are the strengths of the content added? Adding additional literary contributions and a critique of the film will give readers a better sense for how she has shaped American Literature.
 * How can the content added be improved? The womanist section and the movie section need more citations and explanation. I think our readings for class would fit really well here.