User:Foucauldienspirit/Lady Lazarus/JustBort Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Foucauldienspirit


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Foucauldienspirit/Lady Lazarus


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lady Lazarus

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead

 * No lead has yet been written in the sandbox or edited in the article.

Content

 * All of the content added to the sandbox is relevant to immediate topics of the poem and regarding it. However, it is confusing me when you said that the poem was in free verse, but you cite a source that says it is written in light verse.
 * I would say that content is up-to-date, but it is pretty bare. Perhaps this is because the article being worked on is already covering some of the topics, but I think much more information could be added.
 * The subject of mental health and the holocaust may be part of Wiki's content gaps, but I am unsure.

Tone and Balance

 * The added content is unbiased
 * I do not see any particular biased claims either
 * I do not notice any overrepresented or underrepresented viewpoints or content that seems to be persuasive.



Sources and References

 * All of the sources used are non-primary, but I would find a source that talks about the poem's structure if possible. Perhaps the one that calls in "light verse".
 * I would say that there are too many quotations used in the writing. Try to paraphrase a bit more. Sources and references are accurate.
 * The sources are current and come from a wide variety of authors and publications. Maybe add one or two more new sources and it is perfect.
 * All of the links are working



Organization

 * The writing style is concise and easy to read.
 * I only see an individual grammatical error: "Ghasemi writes that these stanzas address the deadliness of the Holocaust in general, but the burning of dead bodies that occurred in particular". The comma is not needed in this sentence.
 * The order of the sections are logical. However, without an updated lead, it does not yet contain an introduction that ties it all together.



Image and Media

 * There are no instances of images, but I do like the inclusion of the stanzas to enhance the message of the section.



Overall impressions

 * Overall, although bear, I do like what has been written in the sandbox for this article. I think it will be important to keep writing at this quality to expand the article and recreate the section of un-cited work that you planned on deleting. Then, the article can be fully sourced and more complete. I think there is more to add too. The added content will be great to further explain the poem itself in the article. Maybe it is possible to find a source describing this more in detail. I think everything looks good, just keep up the work to expand on the article. Maybe you can also try to find some images that would enhance the theme of the article.