User:Frankiefoyjames/Grass (novel)/Bbartonshaw SFSU Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Frankiefoyjames


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Draft: Grass (Novel)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Grass (Novel)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: The lead is still short, but concise. I would ask for a citation support for one of the more opinionated sentences "Grass presents one of Tepper's earliest and perhaps most radical statements on themes that would come to dominate her fiction, namely the explicit link between the despoliation of the planet and gender and social inequalities." I have no doubt, but also, can you pull a source to explain this?

Content: Smart content added and combined. There's a nice flow, and the addition Reception section works nicely with the tradition of Wiki book articles. Very interesting new information brought into the conversation of not just the work, but the author. While this information should be part of her own Wiki page because it has little to do with the book Grass, I still like the drama. Great grammar as far as I can see.

Sources: There's not a whole lot of diversity, but it's much better than the existing article's single source.

Images: No images added, but for a novel that can be difficult and pointless unless it's Gulliver's Travels or something.

Overall: Great work expanding on a novel and providing a fluid and more contextual learning experience.