User:Freckledbaby/Spirit possession/Summer21224 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Freckledbaby


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Freckledbaby/Spirit_possession?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Spirit possession

Evaluate the drafted changes
What have they done well:

- The two sub topics are well related to the main topic.

- Created citations (found references related to the article).

- Good starter header to start the article off.

What could they do better:

- Divide sub topics into new headers.

- Create a reference section and fix little citation errors.

- Add photos to make it look more appealing.

Overall, the article has a good base of content however, organization could be improved by organizing ideas into headers and adding citations by creating a reference page.

- There wasn't much to go on since there wasn't a lot of work done in the sandbox so, it was hard to give precise critiques, therefore it had to be more of a generalization.

What can be added:

- Examples of everyday spirit possession

- Spirit possession related to automatism

- A basic background/ more general knowledge about spirit possession