User:Friskanellin/my sandbox

Some suggestions from Studio 'E'
Hi, Lindosland,

As creator of the Studio 'E' One-valve Radio web site that is cited by the articles on Gilbert Davey and his Fun with Radio book, I cannot help feeling gratified that they have appeared at another's hand, and that you see my site as sufficiently authoritative for citation. I have registered on Wikipedia chiefly to gently safeguard my interests (I have added a note confirming my Wikipedia username on the Welcome page of my site). However I have many interests, and I was not at present considering becoming a seasoned Wikipedia editor!

On the discussion pages for each of these two articles, I have added a few points which (as originator and chief contributor thus far) you may wish to consider.

I note too, that in your short addition to the Boy's Own Paper article, whilst the "Gilbert Davey" link works, the "Fun with Radio" link does not - at my current state of Wikipedia knowledge, I could not begin to guess why not!

As explained above, I do not really wish to ascend the Wiki learning curve any further than I have to. Rather than tangling with editing in the first instance, I am content to make the suggestions as above, and leave you as a seasoned contributor to consider them. Please forgive this newbie for any Wiki-blunders in terms of syntax, etiquette or false assumptions.

I will look forward to any comments you have, either on my user talk page, or on the discussion pages of the two articles. Friskanellin (talk) 12:55, 10 March 2011 (UTC) GD article

Some suggestions from Studio 'E'
The text added at 23.37 on 27 February ("Fun with Radio ran to . . . Associates in 1986.") is a verbatim lift from a page on the Studio 'E' One-valve Radio web site, which belongs to me. I presume this text was imported with the intention of paraphrasing it. My statement regarding the possible existence of a U.S. edition of Fun with Radio is perhaps not very important in the great scheme of things, but I suggest that this verbatim text should be deleted, and that paraphrased text would have a more appropriate place in the article on the Fun with Radio book, in place of the text "The book ran to six editions."

I have a few other gentle suggestions:

Far from being a "newly developing" field, radio was surely a firmly established 40-50-year-old technology by the time that Davey was writing in the 1940s and 1950s.

There is apparently no Wikipedia article entitled "Crystal Set" (I guess this is a purely British expression), but there is one entitled Crystal Radio.

"Boys Own Paper" should be "Boy's Own Paper".

"His designs used early valves . . .". Perhaps a more correct statement might be "His designs used a variety of pre-war and post-war valve types . . .". The article should surely also mention that after some initial caution when transistors first became available to the amateur, Davey developed transistor designs too.

Finally, two cautions:

Studio E (with no quotes) is the trading name of a current London architectural practice. To avoid any possible confusion, my practice with my own site has been to reproduce exactly the name of the 1950s tv programme, Studio 'E' (single quotes round the 'E' - can you point one up and one down with Wiki-code??) and always to use the whole title - The Studio 'E' One-valve Radio, when referring to my web site itself. I assume this is acceptable on Wikipedia.

My own regular searches to date suggest (but do not prove) that Mr Davey is still living. If he is indeed still living, he has reached great age, and I have thought it right not to make any attempt to invade his privacy, and have relied wholly on published sources for my web pages. Friskanellin (talk) 12:55, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

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Some suggestions from Studio 'E'
"Radio construction was, for a while, the number one hobby among boys." I suggest that "Davey's BOP articles made him the most popular contributor on practical subjects among its readers" is nearer what is suggested by the long BOP extract quoted on the Gilbert Davey page of the Studio 'E' One-valve Radio web site which, by the way, belongs to me. Among boys in general, other pursuits such as fishing, train-spotting and collecting were surely at least as popular.

On the discussion page for the Gilbert Davey article, I have suggested that some verbatim text lifted from my site, referring to a possible U.S. edition of the book, should be deleted and, if desired, paraphrased text placed in this article. Friskanellin (talk) 12:55, 10 March 2011 (UTC)